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TOEFL;Should parents limit their children watching TV to make them do well in shcool?


dreamer77 2 / 4 2  
Jul 25, 2013   #1
Hi all, I am preparing TOEFL exam, and this is my second post at EssayForum. Please help refine it if necessary. Thanks a lot:)

Do you agree or disagree: To make children do well at school, parents should limit the time that children spend on watching TV and movies.

agree.
1. weak in self-control. waste a lot of time.
2. many tv programs are not good for children:
3. conversation with classmates.

In 19th century, television is one of an significant inventions and has become a indispensible appliance in every house. For its accessible and containing fancy programs, television attracts audiences from a wide range of age and background. Children, who are addicted to TV, causes broad argument about whether they should be limited in watching television in amount of time. As far as I am concerned, I agree with that children should be forbidden in watching television or movies excessively.

First of all, children generally have weak self-control, and thus they lose their time easily. Watching TV for a long time without doing homework is one of major headaches that most of children have brought to their parents. I, in my childhood, was just a typical case. Whenever I back to home from school, the first thing I would do is turning on the television and sit there for hours. I could watch TV for hours, but I could hardly sit in front of my desk to do homework for few minutes. I could memorize all channels that TV programs was playing, but I could barely memorize any word on the textbook. I, therefore, did extremely bad at school due to the lack of studying.

Moreover, sometimes programs on TV are full of violence and sex which are harmful to children. Children are not mature enough to make a judgment of what is good or bad, therefore they are likely to imitate the behaviors on TV out of their curiosity. Recently, more and more children smoke because they imitate actors' behaviors on TV or movies. What's even worse, according to some statistics, there are more and more children have violent tendency, and the reports attribute this to TV programs and movies. It is obvious that there are many programs on TV or movies that are harmful to children in metal and physical health. How can anyone expect children could do well at school if they have those abnormal behaviors?

Admittedly, in concerning the social relationship with peers, some may support that children should watch TV and movies for their rich contents that could give children some topics in conversation. I agree with this viewpoint to some extent. However, it doesn't mean that children should do it overtime and without being taken care what they are watching.

In considering whether the time children watching on TV or movies should be constrained, I hold a strongly positive point of view toward this issue. Because children are poor at time management, and are less mature to make a good judgment, they cannot be too serious to be taken care when watching TV and movies.
Sdas 2 / 1  
Jul 25, 2013   #2
i think you have written a good essay...
gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Jul 25, 2013   #3
try to study the usage of articles "a", "an", "the", I have noticed many errors on your essay with regard to this matter

"a" is followed by a consonant
"an" is followed by a vowel; however, there are exemptions to this rule, but for now stick to it
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jul 26, 2013   #4
Good introduction :)

I could memorize all channels that TV programs waswere playing

Recently, more and more children smoke because they imitate actors' behaviors on TV or movies.

Recently,more and more children got into the habit of smoke because they imitated the behaviors of their favorite characters in Television programs.

You write very well....good structure, vocabulary, ideas and grammar :)
Wish you good luck with TOEFL! :)


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