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Some parents have many obvious similarities and differences; Compare and contrast essay


swimmer_chick 1 / -  
Sep 22, 2013   #1
Some parents have many obvious similarities and differences. We always think that for a happy marriage, two people must share many similarities. My parents have been married for twenty years and they have a happy marriage. However, people are always curious about how they can even have a word with each other, for they are two different people. Their differences in appearance, personality, and way of living somehow work well together.

My mom and dad seem like two different people but they work really well together even though they sometimes fight. Any parent can be mad at the other for a while but always find a way to work it out. I think that's why my parents work so well together because they never hold grudges. They talk it out. My mom and dad both are very supportive and are the best parents one could ask for. They both enjoy life together, and support my brother and me when we are having off days or when we need a solution to a problem that we have.

My dad is a big goofball that tries to fit in with my brother and me. He thinks he's cool and hip but in reality, he isn't. Some parents weren't as talented like my dad was in high school and college. My dad was the superstar swimmer and water polo player in high school and college. He is very involved with me and my brothers swimming and helps out at all of the swim meets. I believe he thinks that, that keeps him cool and hip. All dads try to be cool and fit in with their son or daughter, I think. My dad is more of the strict parent about schoolwork and making sure we are getting good grades. On the other hand, my mom is more of the strict parent when it comes to getting stuff done around the house and making sure me and my brother are getting everything done. My mom wasn't a star athlete in high school. Most of the time, she was playing tennis with her friends. My mom is from Kansas but moved around a lot as a kid because her dad was in the military, and my dad had never moved as a child and stayed in Washington all of his life.

I don't think I could pick a favorite parent. Both my mom and dad are always there when I need them. My mom and dad have such different parenting styles that I couldn't choose. My mom and I butt heads a lot but I think that's only because we're both girls and we create drama. My mom helps me out with any of my classic girl problems while my dad is tough and has me choose what I think is right. I think my mom is more difficult to handle because of the fact that she and I butt heads a lot.

Although parents are always there for you whenever you need them, none of them are perfect. They can be complete opposites but have a perfect twenty year marriage. One parent can be strict and on task and one can be kind of strict and goofy. It all depends on the family.

marmaria 10 / 30 5  
Sep 23, 2013   #2
Hi
It was better for you to write down the toic , so it was better for us to evaluate your essay
you are writing good but I guess you should try more, because your sentences are not connected with each other. each sentence within the paragraph has a different concespt. It is good for you to read more in english. and one thing else. you should mention your topic in your introduction, but I did not get clearly what was your essay about.

Some parentscouples have many obvious similarities and differences. We always think that for a happy marriage, two people must share many similarities. My parents have been married for twenty years and they have a happy marriage. However, people are always curious about how they can even have a word with each other, for they are two different people. Their differences in appearance, personality, and way of living somehow work well together.it sounds wrong for me, I do not know why, maybe you can say "the differences between their appearances, personalities and lifestyles, somehow work for them"

My mom and dad seem like two different people but they work really well together even though they sometimes fight. Any parentcouple can be mad at the otherwith each other for a while but always they would find a way to work it out. I think that's why my parents work so well together because they never hold grudges. They talk it out. My mom and dad both are very supportive and are the best parents one could ask forwas your topic about parents or couples . They both enjoy life together, and support my brother and me when we are having off days or when we need a solution to a problem that we have.

My dad is a big goofball(is not it somehow rude?) that tries to fit in with my brother and me. He thinks he's cool and hip but in reality, he isn't. Some parents weren't as talented like my dad was in high school and college. My dad was the superstar swimmer and water polo player in high school and college. He is very involved with me and my brothers swimming and helps out at all of the swim meetsSo he help us in swimming . I believe he thinks that, that keeps him cool and hip. All dads try to be cool and fit in with their son or daughter, I think. My dad is more of the strict parent about schoolwork and making sure we are getting good grades. On the other hand, my mom is more of the strict parent when it comes to getting stuff done around the house and making sure me and my brother are getting everything done. My mom wasn't a star athlete in high school. Most of the time, she was playing tennis with her friends. My mom is from Kansas but moved around a lot as a kid because her dad was in the military, and my dad had never moved as a child and stayed in Washington all of his life.

I don't think I could pick a favorite parent. Both my mom and dad are always there when I need them. My mom and dad have such different parenting styles that I couldn't choose. My mom and I butt heads a lot but I think that's only because we're both girls and we create drama. My mom helps me out with any of my classic girl problems while my dad is tough and has me choose what I think is right. I think my mom is more difficult to handle because of the fact that she and I butt heads a lot.

Although parents are always there for you whenever you need them, none of them are perfect. They can be complete opposites but have a perfect twenty year marriage. One parent can be strict and on task and one can be kind of strict and goofy. It all depends on the family
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 3, 2013   #3
We always think that for a happy marriage, two people must share many similarities. My parents have been married for twenty years and they have a happy marriage.

... "marriage" , "married" words get repeated :(
My parents have been married for twenty years and they have led a happy wedded life.

Their differences in appearance, personality, andway of living somehow worked well together.

.... what do you mean by "way of living"? A married couple cannot have a great difference in their way of living. For example, an American way of living is different to the Indian way of living. But inside the same house, when husband and wife have different ways of living, then I doubt whether that marriage could survive by any means.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Oct 3, 2013   #4
My dad was thesuperstar swimmer and water polo player in high school and college. He is very involved with me and my brothers swimming and helps out at all of the swim meets.

]My dad was a star class swimmer and water polo player in high school and college.He is very much involved with me and my brother's swimming activities too.

I believe he thinks that, that keeps him cool and hip

.... I think this sounds a bit slang in an essay.

My dad is more of the strict parent about schoolwork and making sure we are getting good grades. On the other hand, my mom is more of the strict parent when it comes to getting stuff done around the house and making sure me and my brother are getting everything done.

While my dad is strict about our schoolwork and grades, my mom is more strict about our involvement with daily chores.


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