There are many grammar mistakes.
are you practicing for some test? TOEFL, IELST or some other?
I think you should study the English grammar.
Here are the mistakes I could find in the first paragraph.
the most important of all them is to be a parent.
the most important of
them allwas how to be a parent.
Many of people believe that the parent should feed their children with the organic food and provide them with suitable health insurance.
Many people believe
that parents should feed their children
with organic food and provide them with
a suitable health insurance.
parents is responsible about preparing their children to life, including planing their leisure for the following reason.
parents
are responsible
for preparing their children
for life, including planing their leisure for the following reason
s .
You could watch some series, so you would get used with the English structure.
When you think you are ready, try watching series and movies with English subtitles. That helped me a lot!