It will be difficult for you to receive a passing score with this essay. When you do not meet the 250 minimum word count (you only presented 230 words), the applicable word count percentage deductions will ensure that the remaining scoring sections will not be able to boost your final score. No matter how well you do in those areas because you will not be making perfect scores in those areas either.
In modern days, parents should be punished for making their children overweight.
You are making a statement of fact in your paraphrase when this was not presented as a factual opinion in the original prompt. Therefore, the restatement is inaccurate. It is presented as an option, not a definite rule.
The writer's opinion was stated in the expected manner. However, the reasoning summary lacks clarity and proper thought development to offer an increased TA score. Rather, it will reduce the clarity score, the C+C score, and the GRA score for that paragraph.
Parents are not present when the children cancer most of the food.
What does cancer have to do with obesity? Did you mean "consume" the food? It is clear that your English vocabulary is severely lacking, it is not even at a beginner level. Your LR score will definitely be the lowest possible score.
The overall essay cannot be seen as properly developed or explained due to consistent incorrect English word usage. The essay cannot receive a passing consideration for any section. This is the perfect example of how not to write a task 2 essay. This is definitely a failing essay, receiving the lowest possible consideration overall.