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Parents and some teachers recommend naughty and disobedient learners to be taught separately


tranphuongnhi 3 / 5  
Jun 27, 2019   #1

Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.


Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree?


It is undeniable that disruptive students have a negative impact on others. Therefore parents and some teachers recommend that naughty and disobedient ones should be grouped to be taught separately. In my point of view, I totally disagree with the recommendation due to several reasons as following:

First of all, the importance of training bad students is time. It is honestly impossible for teachers to teach noisy ones in the short-term. It requires a long period, cooperation, enthusiastic responsibility of teachers from lower to the upper level, along with regular caring and sharing from parents and families. Therefore, families and schools take good care of uncontrolled pupils.

On top of that, the above suggestion is ineffective. In a class, there are only rebellious and noisy students without ordinary or gifted ones, not only do students feel bored, but the teachers are also fed up with and do not want to teach them. This will have a great effect on the social in the future. Besides, culling the undisciplined pupils means depriving the opportunity to change, to start again because there are no good exemplars.

In a nutshell, although families and schools pay great attention to this issue, I admit the fact that such a way is not only inefficient but also exacerbates the situation in many cases.

tamu 2 / 4 2  
Jun 28, 2019   #2
First of all, I would like to know your definition of "noisy and disobedient." My friend is a teacher, and one time she had an issue with a student who tried to throw a chair because she got angry. If the noisy and disobedient child is causing physical danger to others children around they need to be at a different location because it is not fair for majority to feel scared because of one person. Also, it is better for the troublesome student to find a place that offer good programs to help his/her psychological issues that way the person can thrive socially in the future with no bigger problems.

But, if we are just talking about a kid that is annoying other students, I don't think having a separate class or sending him/her to different place is necessary. The more important underlying issue here is do those kids that get enough attention from their household? If not, is there a way to show that the teachers care for them? These are some questions that are going through my head right now.

That was just my opinion.
Maria - / 1,099 389  
Jun 28, 2019   #3
@tranphuongnhi
Hello there.

First and foremost, work on the structure of your essay. Notice how the transition in your first paragraph is quite bumpy because you were using inappropriate methods of moving between your thoughts. Focus more on an organic approach to writing to help you accommodate to more substantive information in such a short period of time. Doing so will help you minimize the usage of fillers as well, creating a more dynamic essay.

Furthermore, I would also suggest that you try to elaborate with more of an informative tone. Your third paragraph, for instance, appears to be quite baffled and rambling. Evade this type of tone when you are writing as it does not pave way for a fruitful discussion. In your particular case, what you can do is focus more on balancing out your arguments on the teachers' responsibilities versus the behavior of students. Try to create more logical links as to why you think that there is a tremendous social effect caused by undisciplined individuals. Is it genuinely true that teachers focus more on positive students because they get "fed up" with other students? Try explaining things in a more substantive light.

Best of luck in your writing as always.


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