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"The Park Area" - Describe your favourite place essay


PinkyTune 5 / 12 2  
Nov 19, 2015   #1
MY FAVOURITE PLACE

For majority of people their favorite places are in rows of shopping complexes, restaurants, book shops, etc. But my favourite place is the park area. The lovely air, lake, cool atmosphere, lovely milieu, awesome food, and relaxing environment there never quite fail to attract me.

Sweet and fresh air in park areas is simply remarkable. The enchanting smell of lovely flowers spread the atmosphere. In other places in Dhaka city, air is polluted in high rates by dust, coupled with smoke and fumes released from the vehicles. Clean and fresh air in the park is pleasing and unique. We can breathe clean air and our lungs feel fresher.

Lake is the one of the most wonderful things a park has to offer. The sparkling water ripples are irresistible. People often sit at the bank of the lakes and enjoy spending the time looking at the blue sky and water. The touch of nature present in the park is increased highly by the presence of lake. The charismatic nature of the lakes may dupe some men into jumping into it and drowning to their death!

The nice and cool environment is a matchless possession of the park area. The business(busy + ness = business) of the town will move to an end, whenever you will visit a park area.

Good food is an adding taste to a fun-filled visit to a park. Eating excellent food while sitting and viewing the calm scenario of the lake will create such an event that one will never forget.

Lastly, all the components of the park area make the place a peaceful and relaxing one. The natural scene and calmness of the lake will bring your heart peace and you will find it very best to enjoy and relax. Everything there makes us forget our works for a while and just makes us realize that we are children of the nature.

Altogether, I conclude that a park area is my favourite place where I enjoy.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Nov 19, 2015   #2
Hi Soha..
I closely read your writing..
I will give you few suggestions. I hope that these can improve your ability.

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