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IELTS PART 1 - Car ownership in Britain 1971-2007


le_kimhung 1 / 1  
Mar 21, 2014   #1
The graph illustrated the information about the percentage of Britain each citizen car during the period from 1971 to 2007. Overall, The one-car household was the most common type from the late 1970's. Households with regular used two cars rose significantly whereas the number of households without car declined rapidly over the period shown.

In 1971, under a half of Britain population without car and nearly 45% of household own one car. It was uncommon for families had two cars and over two cars in Britain, only 8% and 2% respectively.

The biggest change was seen in the proportion of household without car, which decreased significantly during the period shown from under 48% to around 25%. In contrast, the percentage of resident owned two cards experienced an exponential increase to reach over 26% at the end of period. The two-car the families remained stable and the citizen own over two cars slightly grew during the period.

The graph illustrated the information about the percentage of Britain each citizen car during the period from 1971 to 2007. Overall, The one-car household was the most common type from the late 1970's. Households with regular used two cars rose significantly whereas the number of households without car declined rapidly over the period shown.

In 1971, under a half of Britain population without car and nearly 45% of household own one car. It was uncommon for families had two cars and over two cars in Britain, only 8% and 2% respectively.

The biggest change was seen in the proportion of household without car, which decreased significantly during the period shown from under 48% to around 25%. In contrast, the percentage of resident owned two cards experienced an exponential increase to reach over 26% at the end of period. The two-car the families remained stable and the citizen own over two cars slightly grew during the period.

Please help me correct this writing.

MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 21, 2014   #2
Please help me correct this writing.

Ok but you should attach the graph with your essay :)

The graph illustrated the information about the percentage of Britain each citizen car during the period from 1971 to 2007

The graph illustrates the changes in British car ownership from 1971 to 2007.

Overall, The one-car household was the most common type from the late 1970's. Households with regular used two cars rose significantly whereas the number of households without car declined rapidly over the period shown.

Overall, most of the households owned one car during the period. While there was an increase in the percentage of households owning at least two cars, the proportion of households without a car declined rapidly.

under a half of Britain population without car had no car

nearly 45% of household own owned one car

It was uncommon for families had two cars and over two cars in Britain

The proportions of households having two cars or above were significantly lower

the percentage of residentsowned two cars

owning/who owned

The two-car the families
OP le_kimhung 1 / 1  
Mar 21, 2014   #3
Thank you so much, my writing is so terrible.... I have to try more
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 21, 2014   #4
Don't worry, Hung! You presented the ideas clearly and just made a few grammatical mistakes. Keep on practicing and you will surely improve :)
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Mar 22, 2014   #5
First, you should have uploaded your graph for us to make more meaningful comments. Use the Attach file(s) feature in the Message block to upload your images.

Thank you so much, my writing is so terrible.... I have to try more

Not to worry.... you can keep improving :)


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