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IELTS part1 - Number of minutes of telephone calls in Australia


pakias 5 / 14  
Nov 18, 2013   #1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words


The bar graph compare the total number of minutes made over an eight-year period from 2001 to 2008 in the selected country Australia. The study was deviated into three sections: local, national and international, and mobile.

To begin with, the local category has an increasing then decreasing trend. Beginning at 72 billion minutes, it is considered to be the largest number of minutes in 2001 when compared to the other two categories. Then, slightly increasing until reaching its peak at 2005, namely 90 billion minutes. Afterwards, it began to slightly decrease to have the same number of minutes dialed in 2001.

Moreover, when it comes to national and international calls made, the number of minutes was slowly increasing from 38 in 2001 to 61 in 2008. As can be observed, the difference between the number of minutes made in 2001 and in 2008 was 23 which is not very large unlike the number of minutes in mobile phones where the difference between the first and the last years of study was 44. Clearly, the trend in mobile section saw an increasing trend similar to that of the national and international.

All in all, trends in national and international and mobiles were always increasing throughout the years. It can be concluded that, over the years, the number of minutes was always the highest in local calls and the lowest on mobile calls.



MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Nov 18, 2013   #2
The bar graph compares

the total number of minutes made

You could use "total phone call duration".

in the selected country Australia

has an increasing then decreasing trend

You have to use the appropriate tense for a Task 1 essay. In this case, it is the simple past tense that should be used.
-> The first half of the period saw an increase in the total number of minutes of local calls while the second half experienced an opposite trend.

when compared to

Then, slightly increasing the figure rose slightly until reaching its peak at 2005, namely at 90 billion minutes

began to slightly decrease

-> began to decrease steadily
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Nov 19, 2013   #3
This is the structure I go by for this task;
1. Introduction (your first paragraph is fine for this purpose )
2. Overview (discuss the main trends you observe very briefly)
3. Details (discuss the details more specifically with statistics and data)

To begin with,

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All in all

.... Since this is going to test your report writing skills, you should adopt a more official tone. Other than that this sounds very good.
OP pakias 5 / 14  
Nov 19, 2013   #4
MisterWandering and dumi
Thank you very much for your help!


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