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Writing part 2 IELTS , SCIENTIES TO MAKE POSITIVE CHANGES TO THE WORLD


Thao456 1 / -  
Aug 24, 2019   #1

21st century innovations



Many people are optimistic about 21st century and expect scientists to make positive changes to the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes would you like to see in the new century?

Nowadays, inventing positive innovations to the world has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this trend is not without disadvantages, the upsides will justified these.

There are a number of downsides of that trend. First, by technological development, which can put people at risk situations. In fact the development in the food processing technology is directly responsible for many health problems, such as obesity, diabetes and heart disease, costing a lot of money of citizens and the government. Second, since improvement in technology undoubtedly accelerates industrialization, which leads to intensifying the greenhouse effects. For example, intense use of artificial fertilizers or over-exploitation of natural resources has arisen, leading to environmental degradation.

There are a number of advantages that the majority of people want to see in the future. First, if the future of genetic engineering is advanced, a radical technology can be introduced to genetically modify plants and animals. This means that it will increase crop yield, which in turn generate more income to people. Second, in order to ensure for people's safe food, scientists will be able to teach a machine to find relation between thousands of poisoning cases. Plenty of evidence suggest that food contains many chemicals that is directly affect people's health, which is easy discovered by technological mechanism down the road.

In conclusion, it seems to be a fact that whenever a technology arises, there must be some problems that follow. When people are impressed by the benefits brought by a new technology, it is so important to evaluate its negative impacts.
KeeneSapphire 2 / 6 3  
Aug 26, 2019   #2
There are a number of downsides ... First, in technological development that may put people ... In fact The development in the food ... is directly responsible in many health ... disease that forced the citizens/government to spent a huge amount of money. Second, the undeniable improvement in technology (industrialization) which leads to intensifying ... Some example is the over use of ... over-exploitation of natural resources that leads to ...

The future advance genetic engineering that can genetically modify the plants and the animals and scientists who are able to teach the machines to find relation ... cases are just some of the advantages that people look forward to as this will benefit them a lot. Genetic Engineering will generate more income to people while the machines can ensure the safety of food for people intake.

In conclusion, whenever a new technology develops there is an expected problems that follows. Every technology has its own advantages and disadvantages that we need to thoroughly check.


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