Participation in education and science - Writing task 1 - Bar chart

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialized countries in 1980 and 1990.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The three given charts give information about the average of schooling, the rate of scientists ad technicians spending on research and development in developing and industrialized countries over the period of ten years starting from 1980.

The years of schooling in developing countries and industrialized countries were over 2 and 8 years respectively in 1980. After ten years, the figures for the engagement in education in industrialized countries was nearly as three times as the statistic in developing countries. In the second paragraph, the number of scientists and technicians in developing witnessed a marginal change, from 10 in 1980 to approximately 17 people in 1990. In contrast, there was a considerable increase in the proportion of scientists and technicians in industrialized countries, was increased by 30 people in the given period. Finally, the cost spent on research and development experienced the downward trend which reduced from over 50 billions to in excess of 20 billions in 1990. In contrast, the proportion of allocation money to study and development rose to 350 US billions which doubled the cost in 1980

The writing instruction can be vague aboutthe image reference. It can give oonly a general description since the examiner will be scoring the writer on the correct and specific image qualifiers in the summary overview. That means the writer should be more detailed in his short report. The last thing the writer is expected to present is a cumulative topic sentence. Each summary must be composed of at least 3 sentences. This is based on the single idea per sentence requirement of the C + C section. Failure to do so results in a confusing sentence presentation since it has no clear central idea focus.

It will recieve a failing GRA score for that paragraph as well. The summary is also missing a trending reference so the essay cannot be considered completely developed. Missing important points affect the task and response format accuracy scores.

Incorrect paragraph formatting will also affect the final score. A multiple image analysis should be properly grouped or divided into 2 analysis paragraphs. This essay could have been better presented. The writer should have made an effort to meet the correct formatting requirements to achieve a decent score.