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IELTS WRITING TASK 2: PAYING TAX OR NOT


halleybachelor 16 / 25 1  
May 4, 2014   #1
Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Paying tax is made compulsory for citizens in every country, but some people argue that it is not our responsibility. I disagree with this opinion.

Opponents of paying tax may base their argument on the ground that all private properties should be respected in democratic countries. As long as people earn their money through hard work, they should have complete ownership of it. Governments should not take part of their income away against their free wills. According to their views, the practice of taxation counters the ideals of democracy and liberty.

Unfortunately, these ideals cannot be fully realized without effective governance of the country, which is mainly funded by revenues from taxation. A democratic country does not only need hardworking individuals who contribute to the growth of economy, but also requires being arranged, maintained and controlled as a whole, including infrastructure construction, law enforcement, market regulation and so on. Without sufficient funding from taxes paid by people, they are unlikely to enjoy a well-facilitated and organized life.

Furthermore, taxation is an important way to close social divide between the rich and the poor. People are born with different abilities and brought up in different environments, thereby earning different levels of income. If governments levy high rate of tax on rich people, the money can be used to support the life of disadvantaged ones through social welfare programs. This will help to achieve greater social equality, which is one of the essential goals of democracy.

In conclusion, it is narrow-sighted to keep all the money by ourselves. Everyone should fulfill their tax obligations in order to live in an ordered and equal society.

SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 4, 2014   #2
Hello friend ...

Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I disagree with

In conclusion, it is narrow-sighted to keep all the money by ourselves. Everyone should fulfill their tax obligations in order to live in an ordered and equal society.

... After you state your position in order to answer task in intro, it is better to state too in the conclusion
fikri 5 / 317 71  
May 4, 2014   #3
Paying tax is made compulsory for citizens in every country, but some people argue that it is not our responsibility. I disagree with this opinion.

this introduction is too short, try to grab the readers' attention by giving an interesting overview/hook
ningo 22 / 53 9  
May 5, 2014   #4
In overal view, your writing is good with high-level vocabulary. However, the intro is too short. The following is my suggestion:

Paying tax is made compulsory for citizens in every country, but some people argue that it is not our responsibility. I disagree with this opinion.

From my point of view, paying tax is one of our positive manners to parly contribute to the development of society.
Good luck to your study! <3
sush2 4 / 11 1  
May 5, 2014   #5
I do not see any problem with the essay except that the introduction and conclusion are very short where you need more attention. Hope this helps.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 6, 2014   #6
It seems you can write very well.... However, if I think you better pay a little more attention to your approach, then you can go for a very good band. I and Pahan have provided you with such guidelines in your previous threads and hope you would pay attention to them. Especially, about the body paras where you need to include specific examples to support the reasons you choose to defend your position on the argument.


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