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The 'peaceful' Pacific Ocean, however not without typhoons, earthquakes and hurricanes


ALMAJID06 4 / 10  
Sep 16, 2016   #1
The Pacific Ocean
The pacific ocean is one of earth, has large body of the water which locate in south of the equator and was called by someone known as portuguese explorer ferdinand magellan who found a pacific peaceful (peaceful ocean) and

he begins his journey from the Straits of Magellan to the Philippines. It is not appropriate it's name " the island of the "peaceful ocean" because those often happen typhoons, earthquake and hurricanes. several countries which is border with ocean peaceful such as japan, china and tasman often suffer worried that it make border of ocean peaceful. in last part of something it's name not matching that the situation is very threats for countries border.

rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Sep 16, 2016   #2
Hi ALMAJID06
here are my suggestions,

The pacific ocean is one of eartha part in the earth , which has a large body of the water which locate located in south of the equator and was called (name of the place) by (Ferdinand Magellan ), someone known as portuguese explorer ferdinand magellan who found a pacific peacefula peaceful pacific (peaceful ocean) and

he beginsbegan his journey from the Straits of Magellan to the Philippines.

It is not appropriate it's name " the island of the "peaceful ocean" ...
==> the name itself does not give any sense based on what kind of catastrophe, such as typhoons ......

... border with ocean peaceful such as japan, china and tasmanJapan, China and Tasman ....

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