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A letter to a pen friend whom you plan to visit (my IELTS score?)


masghar 1 / 2  
Sep 15, 2014   #1
My dear Sam,

How are you? I hope you are doing fine and enjoying your summer holidays. Well, I got some good news for you, your wish to spend a summer break with me is going to be fulfilled as I plan a trip to England next week.

I will be accompanied with a close friend of mine, John, as we plan to watch semi-final and final matches of the world cup in Lord's Stadium. We have already bought tickets and would love if you can join us.

I understand you want me to stay with you in your flat, but I don't want you to give you much trouble to accommodate both of us. If you could just recommend a reasonable hotel near your place, that would be great.

Also, suggest some other activities besides watching cricket, where we can all participate in. Are there going to be any cultural festivals during our stay?

I will be waiting for your reply. Pay my regards to Uncle Shah.

Best wishes,
Will Smith

(please review and rectify mistakes, thanks in advance SIR)

fikri 5 / 317 71  
Sep 15, 2014   #2
the world cup

when you write the name of event, you must write it by using capital letter, World Cup

Also, suggest some other activities besides watching cricket, where we can all participate in

this sentence is incomplete, you need a subject between 'also' and 'suggest', if you do not give a subject, it may be an instruction
zjxhz 5 / 14 2  
Sep 15, 2014   #3
To my understanding, a 'you' should be removed from below sentence:

but I don't want you to give you much trouble
bassamfarah 1 / 2  
Oct 11, 2014   #4
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please can you post the question
Vera Canderine 2 / 4 1  
Oct 11, 2014   #5
Well, I [have got] some good news for you, your wish to spend a summer break with me is going to be fulfilled as I [am planning] a trip to England next week.

I think your language is Ok, but the meaning of some sentences is not quite clear.
Anyway, good job. :)


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