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[IELTS task2]: some people argue that fashion items cost too much money.


Natalia1988 4 / 10  
Jul 11, 2014   #1
Prompt: some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Over the time, people has discussed about the unreachable prices of the fashion items, from clothes to accessories. They are becoming more and more expensive and people ask if it is so necessarily have these items in their wardrobe or closets.

There are people who would prefer lower price for fashion items. Youngsters want to get them even if they have not their own income. So, parents fell the pressure of buying these brand products at their children. Most teenagers spend their earning in this expensive shopping. However, even if young adults start to earn money, not always they can afford fashionable clothes, because they have others expenses to deal with.

On the other hand, there are people who believe that more expensive is the clothes more value it gets. As a result, people are happy to pay designer for clothes. Teenagers search this type of item to show at their pair that they are in and fashionable. Celebrities have a lot of money and so they do not mind about the cost of clothes. In addition, they always have to look after their image because they are famous and fans expect to see them at the best way. Besides, fashion designers people cannot criticise the price until they have seen how hard the work behind is.

In conclusion, people have different opinion about this issue. Teenagers, generally, like the idea to get those clothes, but parents and young adult workers cannot always afford them. Personally speaking, I think that it depends on how much fashion is important in your life. I do not mind to buy some dresses instead of others. If the cost is too high, shops and fashion designers can keep those items for themselves.

(288 words)

Please can you help me with the corrections and tell me if it is enough good? Thanks a million in andvance

tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jul 11, 2014   #2
Hello Natalia, spend 10 minutes to make brainstorming for writing task 2.

some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life.

Background which consists of opinion (in background sometimes consists of opinion or fact or both of them)

Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

there are two tasks.

Topic : fashion.
Narrowing down of topic: cost too much money, important part of life.
The task : 1. Discuss both views; 2. give your own opinion.
Focus question : 1. What are the advantages of fashion in people life? ; 2. What are the disadvantages of fashion which cost much money?

Hope, it helps
OP Natalia1988 4 / 10  
Jul 11, 2014   #3
-Task:
First point of view: people who would prefer lower price for fashion items

Second point of view: people who believe that the more expensive is the clothes the more value it gets

My opinion: do not mind to buy some dresses instead of others, I don't buy too much expensive clothes/items

Focus question:
-advantages: -stars must be looked at the best shape, fashionable clothes let them to do it.
-teenagers want to fell accepted from their peers fashionable clothes let them to do it

-disadvantages: -parents fell forced to but items that they can't afford
- young adults who work often can't afford to buy those items because prices are too high.

What do you think??? Thanks a lot for your help.
Misnariah Idrus 19 / 35 4  
Jul 12, 2014   #4
Because it is a discursive essay, in your introduction, I think you should put both two views regarding the topic.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 14, 2014   #6
Over the time, people has discussed about the unreachable prices of the fashion items, from clothes to accessories.

I suggest you to have a more meaningful sentence to open your essay. This should hook your reader towards your writing and therefore it needs to be very interesting.

here are people who would prefer lower price for fashion items.

Actually your prompt is focused more on whether fashion is an important aspect of life or not. You need to argue on this issue from that perspective. If fashion is important in life, then it is fair to spend on it. Otherwise, not :)


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