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Some people argue that judging from the clothes that they wear is not appropriate. Others disagree.


yika 6 / 12 1  
Dec 8, 2016   #1
Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people said that the fabrics people wear are not always the matters to interpret what they are like. In contrary, others argue that someone can be easily evaluated from their appearance. Personally, I think people's clothes can be a method to judge their common character through it is not the only way. The most important thing can be used to assess people is from their behavior.

First of all, people who work in the formal or service institution will always keep their looks in order to give others positive impression while their appropriate clothes can symbolize their good attitude, work ethic, and discipline in regard to the institution they work in. For the example, the teacher wears the formal uniform because it shows the identity of place where they work. Besides, common society can value that the teacher is good worker, discipline and bookish person.

However, apart of people cover, there is another measurement of their personality which is their behavior, such as the communicate and management skill in their job. I will give simple example to illustrate this case, like the capability of someone which can finish the all of work is the most important things in the work field of only the fabric they wear. Another example, someone who wear casual clothes, such musician, is not always person who has not the best experiences in their work, but this performance has the main purpose to express their value. Finally, the really accurate things to judge someone is come from their behavior not from their clothes.

All in all, the clothes which someone wears are easily indicator to interpret someone's personality, but the accurate way to assess it by their behavior.

chadnium000 4 / 4  
Dec 8, 2016   #2
The most important thing is it can be used to assess people is from their behavior...
Whereas, common society can value the teacher as a good worker and also disciplined
communicate ...communication skills
Another example, someone who wears casual clothes, such as muscians, cannot be judged as best experienced in their work by clothes, but their performance is the best way they can express their value. Finally, the really accurate things to judge someone is come from their behavior not from their clothes.
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Dec 8, 2016   #3
Do not create a 'hung' introduction paragraph if you want to reach band 6 or above. It should be clear from the very beginning that the first sentence of the introductory paragraph should be the paraphrase of the question. The second sentence should be your thesis statement. Then, the third sentence should be the OUTLINE of your thesis statement. This will indicate that you have written a clear overall progression within your essay and it is more likely that you will get more than 6 in terms of Task Response. Let me help you by rephrasing your introduction paragraph:

Some people said that the fabrics people [...] important thing can be used to assess people is from their behavior.

It is believed that indicating people's personality can be taken from the clothes that they wear, but other people argue that judging the clothes that people wear is not appropriate. From my point of view, I think that assessing people's character is not only from their appearance, but their behaviour can also be taken into account. Thus, this essay will discuss, first, how formal jobs consider appearance the most and second, how behaviour can be used as a measurement.


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