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What Should People Do To Become Healthier?


Muath1987 3 / 5  
May 20, 2013   #1
Any help, especially with wording, is appreciated. To me, it sounds a bit repetitive and generic, so I'd love if anyone could help with that. Thanks in advance

In societies, human's health is one of the top topics of human's priorities, and people have become more interested to be healthier. It seems that the majority of people have some difficulties to identify the effective aspects that related to their health, others are not. They, however, may have issues with the ways of developing it. In the next following, a description about the aspects of health improvement and a few simple steps of becoming healthier will be given.

A healthy life is what most people are looking for, and the effective aspects of health improvement are hardly identifiable. Despite of this fact, there are several essential of them, and having a wide range of variety activities and regular exercises is the main one. People should take this function in a serious way, and they should have an adequate exercising of walking, swimming and playing various sports. Additionally, mental health is a part of human's health, and it is a term of how emotionally, psychologically and socially is one's health. Sometimes, people need a dedicated time to rest their bodies and minds during their daily life. Once they have relaxed them, their energy will be fully recharged for other ordinary demands of everyday life. Furthermore, following a unique diet is another important type of these aspects, and some people have the wrong view of the diet meaning which is eating a customized food. However, in this context, it means that a person should eat the right food to him such as measuring the amount of Vitamins, Protein and other products of nutrition. Also, a person should not eat a lot of fast food because recently a huge number of sick people have been caused by many restaurants. As a result, these aspects have to be carefully considered by the people who want to be healthier.

By following a few simple steps of health improvement, anyone can easily become healthier. To begin with, self-evaluation has to be at the beginning of any healthy program. This evaluation should answer each of what, where and how questions in order to have a successful starting. Basically, all the physical and mental negative habits in a person's life have to be identified. After highlighting these negatives, a new plan is required to stay healthy.

This plan should contain both of positive alternatives and new efficient ideas, and then it should be replaced with the unusual habits. Moreover, because of a new routine is expected to someone's life, a little patience is highly recommended, so they can go forward and make sure to stick to their plan. Eventually, exercising and social activities are the last step, and it has to be included into the list of a health development plan. As it mentioned previously, these different sports and activities have a high impact to human's health, and it will be reflected to their mental and physical health in a good way. These are the guidance ways that people who are interested on becoming healthier should follow, and it will positively result to a one's health in a very short time.

To conclude, health is undoubtedly important topic to human's priorities. The popularity of people in many societies has realized the importance of being healthy, and some of them cannot classify the significant impacts to develop their health. Well, there are several efficient aspects of them such as participating in the society activities or doing exercises, improving the mental health and making a personal diet, and people have to consider it seriously. By following the guidance points of health improvement, a one's life will become healthier. In fact, becoming healthier is quite easy; however, staying healthy is the most difficult part!

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 20, 2013   #2
In societies, human's health is one of the top topics of human's priorities, and people have become more interested to be healthier.

.... Open your essay with a catchy sentence. It's the first impression you are forming to the reader about your writing and therefore it's worth giving more attention to this first line :)

"Health is wealth", says an old proverb to acknowledge that it is the most precious possession of a man.

It seems that the majority of people have some difficulties to identify the effective aspects that related to their health, others are not.

.... why do you say "others are not" ?
OP Muath1987 3 / 5  
May 20, 2013   #3
Also I realize that you'r correct that no need for 'others are not'

Thanks a lot


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