Write I think/ believe
and so on, or swap with passive sentence: It is thought/ believed
for children. ADD LINKING WORD HERE They give
it of use
Grammatically incorrect form. What are you trying to say here?
no comma in between.
Overall, it is a good try, but you need to consider some changes I've made. Let me give you a try;
Parents are the best teacher. Agree or disagree?
Children are thoroughly influenced by parents (1). For some people, they argue that parents teach their children in the best way. For some other, parents are not always the best teachers (2). In my view, albeit they are never the best one in education, they take more responsible to care about their children, and therefore this affects children's later development and attitudes (3).
The advanced steps to create an opening paragraph are as follows:
, a simple sentence with no more than ten phrases long to attract readers' attention
2. Background information
, if you have a quite long prompt, then simply restate the ideas in the question with your own words. Otherwise, if you have the short one, creating a story related to the topic given is a must
3. Thesis statement
, it is a claim that you have made about.
hope this helps :D
a heap of luck