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Some people believe that the host country should welcome cultural differences.


Kerlion 1 / 1  
Aug 15, 2019   #1
Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


foreign visitors in some country



Part of people think that tourist should follow traditions and behavior but other humans disagree and think that the foreign country should be welcome to cultural differences. This essay agrees that visitors should be welcome to cultural differences. This essay will discuss both points of view.

It is clear that host country needs to be welcome to their foreign citizens. Being welcome to cultural differences in every country very good idea and with this point of view host country can have benefits from tourists. It is therefore agreed that tourist is a key to get a reputation between another country. Azerbaijan is a prime example how this country grows up in a few years with support of tourist despite that our country is Muslim.

However, many people believe that tourist should be well-mannered and don't do wrong things. Behavior yourself good and know traditions of this country where you should travel necessary. Some countries don't like when to their traditions don't pay an attention and sometimes it can be danger. For instance, in Saudi Arabia talking with an unknown girl can be riskily and, in some cases, they can arrest or kill you.

In conclusion, while the benefits of getting from tourist can improve foreign countries and get reputation better than quarrel with tourist about their lack of traditions. However, as long as we are careful to keep in mind the importance of foreign citizens in improvements country, being welcome to tradition differences are clearly positive.
alyssa2036 6 / 19 2  
Aug 15, 2019   #2
I personally think that you should use "I" instead of saying "This essay" because the instruction told you to give your own opinion. saying "This essay" is like you giving an essay you found that answers the question instead of you explaining your own views on the topic.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Aug 15, 2019   #3
@Kerlion
Hi. Welcome to this forum! As you can see, we try our best to provide helpful writing feedback to assist you in your writing endeavors. I hope you gather something fruitful from all of this.

Consistency is key. Bear this in mind when you're writing. Remember that it's critical for you to write with ease, considering that you need to maintain a composed speech that'll help you write with clarity. In addition, I also recommend that you try to incorporate more pauses into your writing. From the first paragraph, it was already noticeable how you had barely used punctuation marks to structure your writing. Remember that simplicity and clarity are essential.

Remember as well that it is important for you to follow conventional writing rules. Be cautious of your composition's flow. Take a look at your second paragraph. The last sentence had quite a lot of fundamental mistakes.
KAURNAVI 4 / 5 1  
Aug 16, 2019   #4
, but other humans...
...visitors should be honored to ...

It is clear that Host country needs ...
Being pleasant to cultural differences ... excellent idea and with this ... can have benefited from tourists. Therefore, tourism is the key to get ...
... prime example of how this country ... with the support of ...

Some states don't like it when to their cultures don't pay attention, and sometimes it can be a danger.

... and get a reputation ...

I have modified some punctuation and grammar errors please check
OP Kerlion 1 / 1  
Aug 16, 2019   #5
Thank you guys,How do you think which score i deserve with this essay?
jocelyne001 9 / 21 13  
Aug 18, 2019   #6
I think it's better not to repeat too many times the same words from the title such as cultural differences and welcome. If you can paraphrase more and lower grammatical mistakes, maybe 5.5-6.
amira11545 8 / 15 5  
Aug 23, 2019   #7
... believe that tourists should ... and don't do wrong things.
( replace it by a more academic phrase like " behave properly", " beware of their behaviors"
Behavior yourself good and ... ( this sentence is full of grammatical errors, try to rewrite it )

Some countries don't like ( use another phrase such as " show disagreement about something" when to their ...
... girl can be riskily ( " risky" is correct ) and, ...

Actually, I think the third paragraph is full of errors and really messed up . But as long as you revise your essay, you will do way better !


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