prioritizing professional workers
It is believed to be contentious to dispute which profession should be deemed pre-eminence and paid more than others. Many people believe that professional workers, such as doctors or teachers, should obtain better revenues. This essay will discuss the aforementioned sentiment and devise the author's opinion.
First, it is universally agreed that well-trained workers, such as doctors or educators, must spend a huge amount of time pursuing sought-after occupations. Therefore, it is understandable that they deserve a better salary to support their living. On the contrary, doctors are demanded to contribute their effort saving people, teachers are asked to burn the midnight oil. What do they receive in return? Few promotion opportunities, inconvenient workplaces and more important, substandard income which merely affords bare necessities. As a result, it is discouraging for young generations to adhere to these jobs unless they are truly passionate. Moreover, professional workers are societal indispensable labor force, with insufficient quantity might decelerate the improvement within the community.
The second apparent observation is that in some Asian countries, especially Vietnam, entertainment industries tend to broaden spaciously with the increase in television series broadcasted daily. However, with such inappropriate content, several entertainment programs might not acquire much enthusiasm or support from the audience. People working for these enterprises, on the other hand, are usually well-compensated. For a firm ground, which most people believe, is that they must exchange substantial physical strength for high productivity such as higher views. It might sound contrary to me since doctors and teachers also put their health at risk to contribute to public health and education.
As I noticed, professional workers should be highly paid for their great devotion. Although the role of entertainment is still vital, we must devise several methods to balance both sides and increase the income for well-trained individuals.
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The writer has turned the essay into a vocabulary usage exercise that does not meet the discussion requirements at all. The writer was expected to present an opinion based on a measured response within the prompt restatement, he did not do that. He did not offer any sort of response that met the measurement requirements. The restatement itself does not really make much sense, nor carry much logic for an English reader because the presentation uses English words that do not suit the original presentation. The discussion paragraphs are faulty for the same reason.
As such, this is nothing more than a vocabulary building exercise. It is not a task 2 essay that can receive a passing score due to incorrect response formatting, incorrect LR presentation, and confusing C+C formats. The final error comes in the form of confusing GRA presentations from the beginning to the end of the discussion essay.