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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos. Discuss and give your opinion.


dilorom 1 / -  
Apr 23, 2015   #1
One of the widely discussed issues today is whether or not keeping animals in zoos is ethical type of entertainment. Some people consider that this trend has no setbacks, while opponents claim that it is abnormal towards animal beings.

On the one hand, it can be clearly seen that zoos bring numerous benefits in terms of protection vulnerable species, entertainment and economy of countries. First, living in zoos protects endangered animals from other's attacks.

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trivial28 1 / 4 2  
Apr 24, 2015   #2
FirstFirstly, living in zoos protects endangered animals from other's attacks. Not only do they conserve them, butzoos also allow animals to reproduce, which considerably minimizes the risk of their extinction. SecondSecondly, they are the major part of people's entertainment. Visiting zoos may be enjoyable and, simultaneously, educational pastime both for children as well as adultsand for adults as well . Children are provided to the avenue to acquire knowledge about various kinds of species which, in turn, widens their horizons and teaches them to appreciate the nature and the wildlife. Furthermore, scientists can be givencan give a scope to observe and analyse animals' behaviour. Finally, zoos make a notable contribution to economy of countries by providing the locals with job opportunities and income for the local area .

On the other hand keeping animals in cages may seem to be abysmal. Admittedly, it is an artificial environment for them, where they cannot feel the freedomfreeand followfollowing their natural instincts. Indeed, it is vitally important for them to hunt, procure the food and roam freely on thistheir land. Depriving them of their natural habitats causes a lot of suffering to these creatures. In addition, the purpose of zoos cannot justify these suffering. If for humans it is just an amusementEven if it seems an amusement for human , it is "life sentence" for animalsbeingswherewhothey are expected to live in cages till the end of their lives. Another point which needs to be considered is that in many cases animals are not obtained a proper treatment in zoos. For instance, they might be given a lack of food or be kept in dirty and sun-drenched places which exhaust them in scorchers.

In conclusion, although some may profess ignorance, it is an indisputable fact that animals also have a set of feelings and emotions which makes me to be thean opponent of imposing any restrictions to these incredible creatures.

Hi dilorom,
this is trivial28. Here are some "thoughts" about your essay. I believe you should reconsider the structure of some of your sentences. Even though I do understand what you mean, I think that is not the right way to express it in English. However, it is a really good essay.
Windachan 13 / 18 5  
Apr 24, 2015   #3
On the other hand, keeping animals in cages may seem to be abysmal.

... animals are not obtained a proper treatment in zoos. For instance--> For the last sentence, it would be nice to omit this. You should make a closing statement for this paragraph after you mentioned "for instance or for example" , they might be given a ...

In conclusion, although some may profess ignorance, it is indisputable ...--> Give a personal thought after this for example "Where possible, it is better if ...


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