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People do not have to bother to cook complex meals because of their unhealthy fast foods


nida26 30 / 19 5  
Mar 14, 2016   #1
In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

These days, eating fast foods are becoming popular for the inhabitants in several countries. Some people believe that the existence of fast food will simplify to do housework, particularly for cooking. However, I strongly agree that consuming fast foods regularly will cause several problems on both families and societies.

The presence of fast food is a solution and good choice for the inhabitants who have a lot of bustle for working and doing their activities. This is because they will have better time without struggling to cook complex homemade food. For example, house wife does not need to prepare lunch for husband and children in the early morning due to the food can be bought later that day everywhere. This means that these fast foods can save time and effort for the people in their life, especially to cook some meals.

However, I extremely believe that fast foods have some drawbacks for families and societies. Firstly, the consumption of fast food is related with health problems. Fast food has low nutrition and unhealthy ingredients, like it has high levels of sugar and calories. It can cause obesity, diabetes, heart disease and even cancers. In addition, the fast food can affect the relation with family, they do not share the common experience of same food or taste anymore, because they order the different menus. Moreover, international fast food can replace the local cuisine, which is the identity of region. It can damage the cultural values of the nation.

To sum up, although the people do not have to bother to cook complex meals because of their fast foods, I firmly agree that fast foods have several issues which have negative effects for people's life.
angga93 42 / 74 20  
Mar 14, 2016   #2
Hello Nida, you successfully produce a good essay. I try to paraphrase your conclusion for your consideration by adding simple reasons. Here is it.

To sum up, although the people do [...] which have negative effects for people's life.

To sum up, it is true that the availability of international fast food can simplify people's daily activity with the abcence of cooking activity. I, however, firmly argue that replacing traditional food with fast food will bring some drawbacks, such as causing health problems for many people and the lost of cultural value in the societies.

nice writing pal
Inastia47 7 / 10 2  
Mar 14, 2016   #3
Hallo Miss Nida,
I have read your good essay, let me give suggestion for your essay.
Please correct me If I am wrong.

The question is : In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies.

In your essay explain about :
first body : the positive effect of international fast food
second body : the negative effect of international fast food on families and societies.
conclusion : you agree that fast food cause negative effect for families and societies.

I suggest you to explain more about negative effects on families and societies in different paragraph. It make your opinion (agreement) become stronger.

Let me give you example :
On families, you can explain about : effect in families health (obesity may cause descendant health) and families communication frequency (misunderstanding)
On societies, your essay "Moreover, international fast food can replace the local cuisine, which is the identity of region. It can damage the cultural values of the nation." need supporting statement how the traditional can be replaced by fast food.

for example :
Moreover, international fast food can replace the local cuisine. Because fast foods are quicker to be processed, people also get good facilities and services. Sooner or later, communities will be unfamiliar with traditional foods and forget the cooking method. It eliminates culture value in societies.

Thank you ^_^


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