The statement implies that people will still get paid but not rewarded for extra accomplishments on the job. In other words, no bonuses for model employees :-)
to gain public recognition and money are two of the dominant reasons for people to go to work. Now that some people argue that recognition by the society plays a more important role in driving the individuals to work , and therefore when the employees are given adequate respect and recognition, they will keep their working passion even if they won't get extra payment. However, it is my assertion that getting paid, rather than public recognition, remains the first and foremost purpose for most workers.
- ... individuals to work . Therefore,
when the... working passion even if they don't
o begin with, though spiritual incentives matter, money indeed matters more . In a commercial society , people have to pay for virtually everything they need for living. For example, the individuals may need the salaries to pay off their student loans, mortgage of houses and cars , travell ing expenses and bills for having dinners outside with friends. These regular bills will grow even more expensive while people get older, as they will have to spend more to support their children's education and their parents' medical care. In order to afford these increasing expenditures, employees usually require a growing annual income. Naturally, that's why people work hard , which is, they expect a higher income as they get promoted by working extra hard. Public recognition will not help them release from the financial pressure of supporting their families. Actually, in my opinion, only after employees' desire for money is satisfied will they further pursue spiritual fulfillment.
- Money matters more in a commercial society
. People have to pay for. Individuals need their salaries to pay for
... houses and cars .
... They expect a higher...
- Your last statement does not help establish anything related to the prompt. Never deviate from the prompt.
Admittedly, rewarding the employees with fame does have some effect on encouraging them to devote themselves more
in to work. However, this will only work in a short term. In the long run, social recognition must convert into real economic benefit; otherwise the unbalance between public status and financial position will eventually drive the employees to leave the company, not only because they feel themselves unfairly treated, but also because they are more competitive on the job market now with greater public recognition.
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short term... Social recognition must convert into real economic benefit for the workers. Otherwise, the lack of balance in their public and financial status... there
are more competitive jobs on the market...
In conclusion, I disagree with the proposal that companies reward the hard wording employees with pure public recognition, as it is economic interest that intrinsically drive people to work
- Merge this sentence with the previous paragraph to create your closing statement.
Modern people work not only for money, but also for public recognition. Some people argue that employers should pay back their employees
' hard work ing with public recognition rather than monetary rewards. With respect, however, I think there is no way that people would work harder merely for public recognition. The way I see it, though to receive public recognition has become an increasingly stronger motivation for people to work , getting paid remains the first and foremost purpose for most people to go to work.
- This is a better opening statement. You should definitely use this hook instead. I just have some adjustments to suggest.
- ... stronger motivation for people to work but getting paid
I hope my suggestions work for you. By the way, you present very good arguments in support of your stand. It is obvious that you considered all the angles of discussion and gave the pro and con reasons for each.