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IELTS Writing Task 2: People with Certain Talent VS Not Having a Certain Talent


indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Jan 31, 2014   #1
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

According to researchers, innate ability is unique in every person. While some people believe that practice can be worked as well as natural ability, I think there are further explanations for this issue.

Generally, innate ability: sport, music or art has known as a specific talent in someone since they were born. Sometimes, we can see that some people who have innate ability do not need to take a lot of practice to be major with their abilities. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo, a Portuguese footballer who plays football from a young child, has sport talent which could win easily in competitions. However, although Cristian Ronaldo is a role model of his ability, he said that he also should often do training.

On the other hand, there is a quote said "perfect practice makes perfect result" which means although someone does not that specific talent, he also could a satisfied effort on something he learned. For example: a Korean pianist, Lee Hee-ah, has only two fingers on each hand. When she was in early age, she did not any talent of playing piano, but her parent support made her doing a lot practice, then she become a masterpiece of piano. From Lee Hee-ah, I believe that learning a special subject could result a masterpiece.

Admittedly, I agree that some of the success and popular people are well-known because of their talent and creations. However, I believe that there are plenty ways to achieve a satisfied effort. Not only efforts but also success in life is possible.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 31, 2014   #2
According to researchers, innate ability is unique infor every person

While some people believe that practice can be worked as well as natural ability,

This is not clear :( In what way practice can be worked? Since this is your introduction you need to introduce the issue more clearly to the reader. So, be a bit more specific.

innate ability

...." inborn talents " is a better phrase for this idea.

Sometimes, we can see that some people who have innate ability do not need to take a lot of practice to be major with their abilities.

More importantly, those who are not born with such talents cannot perform those task satisfactorily. How about singing? There is no point in training if you don't have an inborn talent for singing.
OP indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Jan 31, 2014   #3
Since this is your introduction you need to introduce the issue more clearly to the reader. So, be a bit more specific.

I think because this is introduction paragraph that is why I did not put in detail.

How about singing? There is no point in training if you don't have an inborn talent for singing.

It is because I think mentioning Cristiano Ronaldo as example is enough. Please give me sample correction for this sentence.

Thank you for replaying, and please reply for other corrections.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jan 31, 2014   #4
I think because this is introduction paragraph that is why I did not put in detail.

Well, you need to introduce the issue in the introduction and that is very very important. You don't have to elaborate a lot on it, but it should be read very clear to the reader what the issue is about. It does not happen in your essay;

While some people believe that practice can be worked

It is because I think mentioning Cristiano Ronaldo as example is enough. Please give me sample correction for this sentence.

Ok, let me help you with this :)

Generally, innate ability: sport, music or art has known as a specific talent in someone since they were born.

The inborn talents are a must for one to be successful in fields like music, art, sports etc. Without them it is unlikely that a person can reach the real heights in such fields. For example, the success story behind Cristian Ranaldo, the famous Portuguese soccer player is mostly due to his born talents though his hard work and training have helped him sharpen his skills.


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