Some people claim that the mental power influences the win, the physical strength not so much

18/1/2020:
Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while others claim that mental power decides the winner. I agree that both are important.

On one hand, from team sports such as football, basketball and swimming to dangerous individual sports such as climbing mountains or racing, the participants must have the basic level of physical strength in order to participate. Before matches, the athletes will be checked to be sure that they don't have any serious injury because if they play while injured, they face dangers, can damage themselves, or even die. The Vietnamese runner Michael Le is a telling example. He wounded his right leg just two weeks before a meet, hid his pain, lied to the coaches, and ran the best that he could. Sadly, he fell down during the race and died right on the spot owing to complications from his injuries. Moreover, the athlete who is stronger, taller and bigger, has an advantage in many sports. For example, in soccer, the bigger the goalkeeper is, the more of the goal he can cover and the harder it will be for the ball to go into the net.

On the other hand, there is no doubt that emotions have a significant impact on the performance of the player. Through mental strength, athletes boost their energy, self-esteem and self-confidence. Consider Messi. Compared to other football players his small body is relatively small, yet he always outperforms almost all of them with elegant goal kicks and a feeling of invincibility. In contrast, depression exerts devastating effects on the athletes because it not only ruins their physical power but also distracts them from a winning mindset. For instance, the Vietnamese athlete Van Linh, who became a 5-time world swimming champion was beaten by an unknown. The only reason was that Van Linh had just broken up with his girlfriend right before the meet.

In view of what was mentioned above, obviously, physical and mental strength are both important for success in sport but somehow the physical power wins out because it is the factor that decides whether a player can join in a competition.

@Nora2001
Hi Writer,

On the first paragraph, you should paraphrase the sentence, instead just writing it the same then add your opinion. and on the last paragraph, consider to give your own opinion

This essay is over discussed. You should be presenting up to 290 words only for this type of 3 paragraph reasoning discussion. It is difficult for me to say this but, even though you overwrote, your response format is still incorrect in some aspects. For example, in the opening paraphrase, you did not appropriately restate the two public opinions, in individual paragraphs, before indicating your own opinion, as another separate sentence. A 3 sentence presentation for that section would have been more appropriate.

You discussed the essay only from your personal point of view using the 2 topic sentences. The discussion for this type of presentation covers the explanation or reasons for the existence of the 2 public points of view, upon which your personal point of view will be based. Hence the 3 paragraph format. There is a lack of public reasoning in the discussion presentation which indicates that you only considered your personal opinion in the presentation, rather than the public reasoning considerations. That makes the essay selective in response, which means it will be scored as such by the examiner.

@Holt
Thank you for your comment.
I have a question for you. In my essay, I use lots of examples from reality, so why did you think that I only gave my personal point of view?