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People consider computers to be the most important breakthrough


ngoan 1 / -  
Jan 10, 2020   #1

Are computers the most important invention of the last century?



A number of inventions in the last century make our life more convenient than ever before that people consider computers to be the most important breakthrough. I completely agree with that argument, especially in the modern world like nowadays that computers not only do help us in working, it also gives us a huge amount of knowledge in almost every field.

People used to spend most of their time only for analysing statistics and information themselves without any help from technology that we only need 10 minutes to finish something like that nowadays. Therefore, computer inventions have a key role in people's working, especially with the more development in the design and stucture that make it even easier for people to bring along.

Recently, the internet makes a breakthrough in our style of communicating, working, even the way we do shopping. Today we can communicate with our friends and family via the internet using a computer. It is now a well- functioning device that we are able to keep in touch with people and expand our relationship. the way we do shopping also change thanks to online commercial development. Finally, in working environments, we can organise only meeting that connect manager board from any countries that we want.

In conclusion, in terms of beneficial that we can get from the invention of computer I have aldready showed above in this essay, we can claim that this is the most important creation contributing to human development.

Annie97 3 / 6 2  
Jan 11, 2020   #2
Some collocations are not exactly correct, such as "expand our friendship", and some phrases are redundant, like "via the internet using a computer"--you must be using the computer when you are on the internet.

You should use more liking words in paragraph 3 otherwise it is hard to follow your logic.
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,665 2035  
Jan 13, 2020   #3
Well, you certainly made your opinion clear in the essay, even with the problematic grammar and sentence presentations. You made valid points but had problems in your written presentation. You have several spelling errors that you failed to correct because you did not review and edit your essay before submission. Spelling mistakes count towards points deductions. There is a problem with the conciseness of your word choices. That means you need to learn to express yourself using fewer, more applicable words in your sentences and paragraphs. This can only be done if you can manage to build your English vocabulary based on proper word usage. Practice developing simple English sentences aside from practicing to write your essay responses.


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