the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad
The diagram provides information about how many people contracted diarrhea in Mashhad throughout the period from 1983 to 1992. Overall, the number of people who suffer diarrhea in Mashhad had a tremendous fluctuation over nine years.
Evidently, in the first two years of 1983 to 1984, the quality data of cases of diarrhea plateaued at 100 cases and rose slightly to reach about 110 cases in 1984. After that, there had a marked growth in 1986 when the number of cases was almost 65 cases higher than in the first two years. And then its doubled that of the first two years level out at 200 people in 1987. However, this upward trend dropped in 1988 to the same level as in 1983 and 1984. The year 1989 came with a dramatic increase peaking at just above 400 cases, but this was not to last as they dropped again. In 1990 and 1991, there had the same level of 350 cases and the number of cases plummeted dramatically in 1992.
In conclusion, the number of cases at its highest in 1989 whereas the weakest figures could be observed in 1992.
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