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People dream things that are often almost impossible achieve;Compare &Contrast Essay


Aeryn 1 / 1  
Apr 25, 2013   #1
In some cases people tend to dream about thoughts that are often almost to impossible to do for certain people. Even though there dreams are way out of reach, that doesn't stop Herbert Nitsch and Dean Potter from doing what they believing in; surpassing their limits. In breathless Herbert had always dreamed about staying underwater whereas Dean's dream is to fly without a parachute not equipment attached to him. Both "Breathless" and "Icarus 2010" sends the message that even though there hobbies are completely different, they are willing to go the distance to achieve their goals without having any sort of strings attached to them.

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andrea94 3 / 9 1  
Apr 26, 2013   #2
In some cases people tend to dream about thoughts that are often almost to (do you mean too?) impossible to do for certain people(try not to use repetition) . Even though theretheir dreams are way out of reach, that doesn't stop Herbert Nitsch and Dean Potter from doing what they believing in; surpassing their limits. In breathless Herbert had always dreamed about staying underwater, whereas Dean's dream is to fly without a parachute notwithout an equipment attached to him. Both "Breathless" and "Icarus 2010" sends the message that even though theretheir hobbies are completely different, they are willing to go the distance to achieve their goals without having any sort of strings attached to them.According to (Page 4) of Breathless, "Even before he was a free diver, Herbert Nitsch dreamed he could stay underwater" Herbert had a belief of livingbelieved that a person can live underwater without the need of fish gills or tanks filled with oxygen. Now Nitch is 40 years old and a part time pilot for the Australian airline, Nitch he believes he is as close to his dream more than everextremely close to his dream . In his past Herbert has been able to set "31 free-diving records including the "no limit" diving" (Page 4). In which an individual uses an(do you mean any?) means available to dive as deeply as he can on a single breath. To do something that he enjoys very much is the key motivation that he lives by to get closer to his underwater dream he was later asked what was too deep, an impossible depth Nitch responded"Something like 1,000 meters" Even though he tries many different diving techniques to descend deeper, such as conserving oxygen and "blood-shifting" where he tricks his body into thinking it's drowning (Page 7), there are limits that he can transcend. He falls into many risk's such as compression sickness, where nitrogen bubbling out of his blood into his brain and joints. However , throughout the year's Nitch has done the math, taken the necessary measurements and procedures in which he believes that eventually the body will stop fighting and give in to the pressure and the brain will decide there is nowhere to go but down.

On the other hand, Dean Potter lives to fly, whereas he has set world records for" height, distance and duration in a wing suit (Page 227)." His passion for flying is like no other and just as Herbert Nitch's dream of living underwater, his dream is to fly in jeans and a shirt without a wing suit nor parachute and walk away from the landing. Being a base jumper takes a lot of stability and concentration as any wrong move that a person makes can causecost them their life. There have been incidents where Potter had crashed and hung himself from tree' s, "I've had a lot in fact there was an incident that happened where he decided to run the slab and within a couple of steps he slipped and slid 80 feet, hitting a ledge that had saved him from a near death experience. Even though these major injuries have taken a decent amount of damage to his body he continues to do what he loves most. When you dream goes far beyond your limits, there is no stopping you goingnothing will stop you from going the distance to finally achieve it. Even though he has seen some of his friends die through his years of climbing, I would of thought (what do you mean?) that his journey would end there but mainly, it just keeps going for him. Is he an adrenaline junky or on drugs? Who knows, but when going all out for an unbelievable dream he could be.

Even though both Nitch and Potter are two completely different people, they do share many similar traits about them. They both are willing to go above and beyond to achieve the impossible. What I've been taught from these two individuals is that people shouldn't look down towards their dreams no matter how far and impossible it is. In fact people should do what they love to do . Even if there are some dreams that are out of reach it doesn't hurt to give it your best to make that dream into a reality. Even at the brink of times where they would possibly lose their lives in certain situations that didn't stop them, in fact due to those mistakes it helped improved themselves for the future

You should simplify the essay because sometimes it is hard to understand what you want to say. Try to be clearer.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 26, 2013   #3
In some cases people tend to dream about thoughts that are often almost to impossible to do for certain people.

Some people dream about things that others may tend to view as impossible to achieve.

Even though theretheir dreams are way out of reach, that doesn't stop Herbert Nitsch and Dean Potter from doing what they are believing in; surpassing their limits.

.... pay attention to grammar; if you want to express this in past tense then it should be "wer believing"

In breathless, Herbert had always dreamed about staying underwater whereas Dean's dream iswas to fly without a parachute not equipment attached to him.

.... maintain one tense and also pay attention to punctuation.

Both "Breathless" and "Icarus 2010" sends the message that even though there hobbies are completely different, they are willing to go the distance to achieve their goals without having any sort of strings attached to them.

Both "Breathless" and "Icarus 2010" convey the message that even though they had completely different interests, they both were willing to go the extra mile to make their dreams a reality taking up all the challenges that came their way.
OP Aeryn 1 / 1  
Apr 28, 2013   #4
Thanks for the feedback, guess that's what i get for procrastinating till the last moment


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