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Writing IELTS task 2 : People still can be fashionable without spending much money


ashelarisa48 36 / 52 4  
Sep 2, 2016   #1
Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion in an important part of life.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Some people think that being fashionable is too expensive, while others argue it is an essential thing to support their appearance. I believe that it is important to be fashionable but it does not suppose to cost much money.

Fashion items, especially the branded stuffs, are often priced so expensive. Some people think it is fair enough because most of them have a high quality as well. In addition, people who need to buy it usually are because of several reasons, such as their job pretension, lifestyle, following their favourite artist, or not want to be looked outdated. They believe that fashionable dress makes them more confident.

However, fashionable appearance is not always about something expensive with a new brand. People can combine their old items or overhaul it to make it stylish. Even if they have to purchase a new one, they have to be smart enough to select a fashionable and high quality dress with a suitable price. A fashionable stuff sometimes has an unbelievable price whereas it can be cheaper in the different shop. In my experience, I have ever found a usual shirt priced three times more expensive than a similar shirt in other clothing store. Of course, it does not make any sense.

In conclusion, what people wear is an important thing to build a good impression. The price also usually has a positive correlation with the quality. However, people have to fix it with their financial capability. They still can be fashionable without spending much money if they are smart enough to mix and match the fashion items or find the stuffs with a normal or cheaper price.

rian31 14 / 22  
Sep 2, 2016   #2
hallo ashelarisa
let me give you some suggestions
I hope it helps you

Some peopleSociety think that being fashionable is ...
... but it does not suppose to cost much money. because ...(give a reason for correlation into the next body paragraph)

Some peoplecitizen think it is fair enough because ...

In my experience,Iavoid subject pronoun have ever found a usual shirt ...

In conclusion, what people wear people's outlook is an important thing to build ...
Hary01 12 / 13 2  
Sep 2, 2016   #3
... being fashionable is too so expensive, while others ...

... are often priced so highexpensive .
In addition, people who need to buy it usually are because of several reasons...

... about something expensive with a newfamous brand.
... has an unbelievable price whereas it can be cheaper in the different shops .
...I have ever found a usual shirt with priced three times (...) in other clothing stores .

The price also usually has a positive ...
... if they are so smart enough to mix and match the fashion ...
daya93 4 / 6 1  
Sep 3, 2016   #4
Hi neighbor,

Your essay is quite good but I think you should to add topic sentences into each body paragraph.I ought recommend you to use this trick for your IELTS task 2:

1 Make an outline first for your first 10 minutes.
2. Ensure your introduction consist of an overview and topic statement
3. Write topic sentences for each body paragraph, continue with supporting points, explanation and examples.
4. Conclude all by paraphrasing your statement in introduction paragraph.

Keep eager to enrich your vocabulary because I see some repetition in your essay.

Wish you to the cloud nine!


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