Hellow everyone, this is my second essay of my practice for this month's SAT and I could really use your help here.Thanks a lot for you time!
Prompt:Should people let their feelings guid them when they make important decisions?
The dispute between the advantages and disadvantages of subjective and objective mind was posed long ago and is still far from over. Indeed, rational way of thinking in general enbles us to avert potential unwilling results but sometimes in specific circumstances or in an urgent time of life people's instinctive feelings in turn lead to coup.
To begin with, Galilei can be described as one of the founders of mechanics but when such aan erudite scientist made up his mind and decided to support the Helio-centric theory, I belived at that moment the yarning for truth, an inner feeling, replaces the 'rational' part in his mind. It is true that he was chastised drastically when he was alive but when he expired this 'impulsive' decision made him a hero of millions of people. So it is clear that when numerous scientisits forgo their youth, their bliss, and even their life, on the road acsertaining the truth for common wealfare and development of mankind, what demonstrates is not ration but emotion.
Meanwhile, the Nomandy-Landing, crux of World War II and sign of victory, was least to be called a sensible action when it was broached. As a matter of fact, the allies have a perfect landing area near by, which is much better than Nomandy on account of nearly all aspects, but the general Arthur chose Nomandy by his hunch. On that day, the other region was surrounded by strom but sun still shined in Nomandy, so as a result, half a million allies safely boarded from Nomandy and became a decisive force to end the war.
In most part of life it is greatly necessary and encouraged for people to do loads of work before they make decisions but in particular cases like the persuit of common welfare, sticking to the voice of their heart will sometimes achieve unpredictable accomplishment.
That's very well written and has excellent examples, but maybe you should write about your gut feelings to pursue something you have the passion and ambition for and will be happy to keep doing that for the rest of your life. For example, my passion is to be a fighter pilot, and I'm willing to do anything get to it because even if it kills me, I'll be doing what I love. I'm also still doing a gut feeling by providing my insight to your thread because someone just replied to my thread, and I feel that I have to pay it forward.
Ugh...zebra, thank you for your advice but do you think it will be better if I pose my thesis fist at the beginning of every paragraph? You know that I actually write examples first...As for gut feelings, I am just a little bit worried about it...Of course the first full score essay I read is the AP girl in the old OG for SAT, but my teacher always tells me that you'd better(well, I think it's 'must' actually) use examples of literature and celebrities...Any way, thanks a million for your help
By the way, I feel the same that I need to reply other's thread. I give myself a target that I will reply at least 2 threads per day...In fact, I really enjoy doing this
Yes, that's right. The thesis should go right at the end of that short first paragraph you have. Now, subjective means to see something from one's own perspective, and objective means to see it without distorting it by viewing it through the lens of preconceived ideas... let the reader know exactly what you are talking about in that first paragraph. Good idea!!
This has great potential. In that first para, tell the reader that both ways of thinking can be right or wrong, depending on the situation.
In the last paragraph, describe the same idea in different words. That will give the essay some structure... good intro and conclusion provide structure.
