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How many people of both gender registered in a fitness center between year 1970 and 2000


BAMS14 18 / 29  
Sep 14, 2016   #1
WRITING TASK 1 MEMBERSHIP FITNESS WOMEN AND MEN BETWEEN 1970 AND 2000

The bars chart shows quantity of fitness membership women and men between 1970 and 2000. All of all bars chart has shown the highest men membership was in 1995 peaked at 5000, and the highest women membership was in 1985 simillar in 1995 peaked at approximately 2800. In the opposite the lowest men custommer was 1000 in 2000 and women membership was 1000 in 1970 .

Based on bars there was facinating phenomena, men membership increasing three times during five years from 1970 to 1995 as much as the number of 3000, while there was similar between men membership in 2000 and women membership in 1970 grades 1000. In 2000, men membership droped dramatically 3000 in reach trought of 1000, it was similar to first year in 1970. During 1980 to 1990 bars has shown fluctuated men and women member. The unique data shown in 1990 almost simillar between men and women member, it was shown only little gap grow both men and women, meanwhile decrease from 1985. Among 1970 to 1980 men membership always bigger than women membership.



fadhilmd25 41 / 75 11  
Sep 14, 2016   #2
Dear Bams, here are some advices for you,

All of all bars chart --> bar chart means the whole bar chart, better just state in a bar chart

Based on bars there was facinating phenomena --> we can make it in formal way like There is significant increase in both graphs.....
mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 14, 2016   #3
hi bams

The bars chart shows the bar chart displays the quantity of women and men fitness membership ...
All of all bars chart has shown the highest men ...
In the opposite the lowest men custommer was ...

Based on bars there was facinating phenomena????, men membership increasing three times (...) there was similar between men membership in 2000 and women membership in 1970 grades 1000.
Among 1970 to 1980 men membership always bigger thanwomen membership .

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