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People should not be judged by clothes they wear


nurannisaputry92 36 / 27 2  
Mar 30, 2016   #1
Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


As it is commonly understood, fashion has become lifestyle and phenomenon in society. Some community assumes that dresses people wear are essential to identify the characteristic of human even the strata of social. However, there are several arguments state that people should not determined by clothes that they wear. In my point of view, outfit is not only the way to judgment as personality or behavior is dominant factor to judge someone.

These days, the characteristic of human can be observed by the way people wear costume because it is easily to notice what people like and interest. For example, according to UNICEF, eight of ten teenagers can recognize the hobby belongs to their best friend based on the style and looks due to the fact that inhabitant tend to choose the fashionable clothes depending on taste and leisure activity. It is impressive that characteristic of humankind can be decided by the material that they use in daily activity.

Furthermore, individuals can identify the social status of society. This is because person can faster distinguish what is branded dress that people wear. For instance, according to survey conducted by UNFPA, more than 17,000 citizens in New York can be identified whether has high-revenue or not by looking after people's clothes. This is also triggered by many commercial brands that appear in society. Undoubtedly, it is easily to detect the social level by perceiving the clothes that they wear.

On the other hand, I personally believe that public should not be judged by looking at the appearance and style as characteristic and behavior are predominantly making people more care each other. For example, Einstein, genius one who never concern about fashionable and modern-dress, but he can be recognized as well-known scientist due to their ability and personality. It is evident that the appearance not becomes the main way to judge people.

To sum up, although the appearance and clothes is necessary to indicate the character and social status, I personally believe that it is not wise to judge person by seeing the material that people use.

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Mar 30, 2016   #2
Hi Nur, I believe you are the 5th of the students who responded to this prompt and believe me, no offense to the other students, but your's is one answer that is well structured, it has the essential information to address the prompt.

One more thing that I notice on your essay is that it has facts, this approach is highly regarded as you are not writing for the sake of depicting the ideas you have in order to answer your essay but you wrote an essay with a step ahead.

The introduction is also unusual, on a positive note, as it is already giving hints on what to expect on your essay.

Nur, I suppose what I mean is that I hope you keep up the good work on writing and answering the prompts in a way that it thinks out of the box and incorporates facts, this goes to show that you are trying your best and stepping up the game.

The best of luck to you and we're here should you need our assistance.
cyclone96 2 / 3  
Mar 30, 2016   #3
I agree 100% people should not be judged by what they wear. However, a lot of people love to express themselves without saying a single word through their attire. For examples, some people like vibrant colors because it makes them happy and others like cool dark colors because it calms them down. In reality, we are not "blind" to the 7 second judgement we give people from appearance.

In a sense, we can't help it. Some people dress the way they do for a reason. I would just tone it down and not make harsh judgements based on appearance.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Mar 31, 2016   #4
Hi, Nuranissaputry. here my comments that i focused on your two first paragraphs. keep writing

Some communitycommunities --> plural/singular issue assumes
that dresses --> i think rather than used dresses, it is better to write 'dress' [uncountable means style of clothing] in this sentence
people wear are essential to identify the characteristic of humantheir characteristic even the strata of socialstrata or stratum (singular) is definitely related to social class in society so just write strata is a proper wordtheir strata . However, there are several arguments state that people should not determined by clothes that they wear. In my point of view, outfit is not only the way to judgment as personality or behavior is dominant factor to judge someone. hard to understand

to judge based on the outfit is not the only way as personality and behavior are the dominant factors for judging someone

These days, the characteristic of human can be observed by the way people they wear costume because it is easily to notice what peoplethey like and their interest.in order to reduce repetition especially 'people' word in a sentence.

For example, according to UNICEF, eight of ten teenagers can recognize the hobby belongs to their best friend their best friend hobby based on theIR style and looks due to the fact that inhabitant they/adolescents tend to choose the fashionable clothes depending on taste not proper word with clothesand leisure their kinds of activity. It is impressive that characteristic of humankind can be decided by the materialto common, used cloth, garment, fabric, textile instead that they use in daily activity.
fardan10 18 / 25 1  
Apr 7, 2016   #5
This is my suggestion to present your phrase well by some adjusments:

Your sentence:

Furthermore, individuals can identify the social ...
(Furthermore, stratification of social status in society can easly to be identified by observing branded clothes which are worn by people.)

This is also triggered by many commercial brands that appear in society. (this sentence seems redundant since it has been explained in the introduction of paragraph) ->> (MY suggestion)As a consequence, many commercial to be a measurent of human perceive. Undoubtedly, detecting clothes brand as a common way to judge people prestige.


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