Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
The issue about whether should employers to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender is open for debate. Some people say, that women are incapable to do some of men's work. How ever, other people believe that all genders are equal and some women can easily do all men's work. Personally, for several reasons, which I will explain below, I adhere to the later point of view.
First of all, I think that every person should be able to make his or her choice when we talk about occupation. When I was a teenager my parents didn't forbid me to choose my future profession,so now I can describe myself as a good specialist in a man-dominated profession.
Second of all, it is hard to judge about person's abilities and talents just according to her or his gender. Therefore, an employer may to miss the chance to hire good specialist just because particular gender is no so common for this kind of occupation. For instance, my former classmate is a typical good-looking young girl: she is tall blond with blue eyes and slim body. And after she had ended an prestige university and became an engineer of echo-location she had a lot of job interviews. Most of HRs didn't even send test examples to her after a meeting, they just haven't considered her as a good employee.
Finally, every individual may have some unusual for his or her gender trails of character. More other, some of them just could be gifted. In this case gender prejudices compel to forget about work which one is really good at. For example, my uncle always wanted to be a cook, but afraided of people's words, because he is assured that it is female profession.
To sum up, I think people should be judged by employers by their education, experience, and character only. Certainly, there are occupations there particular gender is more preferable, but if someone wants to try himself in it so society need to allow to do it.
Yobin already pointed out the major problem of your essay, that of the lacking reference to your occupation in the second paragraph. So I will just go ahead and show you the grammar corrections needed in the paragraphs you created.
Par. 1:
The issue about whether should employers to should
Some people say, that women are incapable to do some of of doing men's work.
some women can easily do all men's work.
Personally, for For several reasons, which I will explain below,
Par. 2:
so now I can describe myself as a good specialist in a man male-dominated profession.
* Mention what your profession is in order to explain why it is male dominate. This paragraph is also too short since it has only 2 lines in it. It needs at least 3 sentences to be accepted as a complete paragraph with a complete and explained thought.
Par. 3:
it is hard to judge about person's abilities and talents just according to her or his gender.
And after she had ended an prestige graduated from a prestigious university and became an echo- location engineer of echo-location Most of HRs didn't even send test examples to her after a meeting,
they just haven't didn't considered her as a good employee.
Par. 4
may have some unusual for his or her gender trails of character for his or her gender.
More other, Or, some of them just could be gifted.
In this case gender prejudices compel an employer to forget about work which one is really good at.
For example, my uncle always wanted to be a cook,
but afraided he was afraid of people's words,
because he is assured was told that it is female profession.
