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Some people may get specific traits or skills by born or it can be achieved only by practice?


sfiza 17 / 28  
Sep 23, 2017   #1
It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become good sports person or musician.

talents can be taught



By born some people get specific traits. While most people believe in that, others argue that such trait could be achieved with practice. I agree that those traits are gifts from nature, but could be strayed without continuous practice.

Talented people have inherent abilities that enable them to be special in a particular area. Even some , never had any teaching or any special teaching when they were young. They have grown up with innate capabilities and doing outstanding performance in their own field like music or sports. For example, there are a lot of sports teams which had best training sessions, but they are losing consistently. If talent had nothing to do with success, people with better trainer would always have performed better than others who have natural talent.

On the other side, talent alone is not enough without specific practice in different cases. In the spite of being talented some may not know how to use their talent; in this case they need to replenish their capabilities with practice and learning. For instant, some has good voice; they don't have any idea about rhythm, scale, and harmony that are required to improve in singing. For this reason, Despite of being talented training is mandatory with skilled one to be unique. Conversely, learning method can't be work such people who have no natural quality.

To conclude, naturally human traits come from genetics that appear in different way. It is not possible to have such traits any other ways, but it might be strayed without nurturing. Although, talents are not gained by learning, I gravitate towards that leaning enhance people's capabilities.

Tanveer Ahmed 3 / 7 2  
Sep 23, 2017   #2
i can rectify some grammar mistakes hereunder:
doing an outstanding performance
some have good voice
Talent are not gained it should be talent do not gain by .
renzotello 2 / 2  
Sep 23, 2017   #3
@sfiza
this essay contains very good vocabulary.
but dont like the last sentence I gravitate towards . I would say. I support the idea of
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,653 2033  
Sep 23, 2017   #4
FiZa, an accurate review of your essay cannot be completed as your original prompt posting does not include the discussion instruction sentence. Without it, I cannot properly determine whether or not you have properly understood the discussion topic and the discussion method that must be referred to in the essay. This is an integral part of determining your TA score which means that without it, the first score of your essay, which will be the basis of the remaining 3 criteria, cannot be assigned. What I can tell you though is this, your opening statement is so incoherent and lacking in cohesiveness that there is absolutely no way it can be considered as a proper representation of the original prompt discussion and its requirements. Since your opening statement is incomprehensible, it is safe to assume that the essay will fail the TA section in an actual setting. You presented a series of phrases and sentences that do not have an appropriate subject for the sentence to the reader. These faults are serious and will definitely bring your score down to a non-passing level. You must always do your best to fully and accurately represent the original prompt discussion in the opening statement. When you fail to do that, then the rest of your essay score will be in danger of failing as well.


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