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People who do not prefer change are pessimistic and who like changes- optimistic


rachana 2 / 2  
Feb 28, 2014   #1
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good thing. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The statement above is controversial. Some people do not prefer the change while some do. People who do not prefer change falls into pessimistic people while who prefer change are optimistic people. Pessimistic people are static in nature. They are happy within their boundary. People who do not want changes have their own limitation and they grow within that limitation. They are satisfied people. They do not want momentum in life. They are contained with whatever they have. These people set a target in their life and spend their whole life pursuing it and when they get, they are satisfied. They like to live within their comfort zone. For example, most of the bank cashier their main job is to collect, count, give and take of cash. They work their whole life doing same routine job, there are some exception but it's rare. Most people believe that staying secure and maintaining the current circumstance is the best way to live safer.

Nevertheless, many people do need change. They have no boundaries, no limitation. They accept and welcome changes. Due to the fact that change brings opportunities, they can learn different new things in life some people prefer change. For example, these days most of the leading companies encourage their employees to rotate jobs. Job rotation makes their employee learn new things and make them more competent.

Hence, I personally believe changes are inevitable. We cannot avoid change. Since whole world is changing hasty why should I remain unchanged? To become competent enough and to accept every challenge that comes in today's world one should accept change.

fikri 5 / 317 71  
Feb 28, 2014   #2
I read your essay very interesting, you made the reader interest to get the contains of your essay deeper,,
hope you would improve your skills on writing
tylermk96 3 / 5  
Feb 28, 2014   #3
I would say you need to have less simple sentences. Add complexity to your writing and try not to be overly repetitive. Also, change the way you start your sentences. As of right now, it reads very choppily, but with a few steps, could be improved.

Example:
People who do not want changes have their own limitation and they grow within that limitation. They are satisfied people. They do not want momentum in life. They are contained with whatever they have.

Try saying something like:
Those who detest change limit themselves, but within their limits they thrive. In their case they are content with their position and have no desire to move forward.

Or something - just a suggestion.

Good luck!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 4, 2014   #4
Well, I need to request a few admin things from you;
1. You should choose the most appropriate forum when you open a new thread. In this case it should be Writing Feedback forum. (I moved it form Graduate to Writing Feedback)

2. You should include the purpose (e.g. TOEFL,IELTS,GRE etc.) in the title itself so that it helps others to provide you with task related feedbacks

3. You also should include the prompt in your essay so that we can provide you with more meaningful feedbacks.
Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Mar 4, 2014   #5
Hi Rachana,

The statement above is controversial.

---> I feel this sentence is not appropriate to start.

Strictly divide your essay into 4 paragraphs as suggested by Pahan.

Nevertheless, many people do need change. They have no boundaries, no limitation. They accept and welcome changes.

Try to frame your sentences in complex statement structure something like " However, there are people those who are eagerly willing to face new challenges and there is no limitation in their widespread boundary."

For example, these days most of the leading companies encourage their employees to rotate jobs.

I dont think companies are encouraging the job rotation these days May be you can say like this

Nowadays, people hate monotonous job, for example software professionals seem to change their jobs every two years on an average, in order to increase their financial status and also to explore their knowledge in various latest technologies

People who do not prefer change falls into pessimistic people while who prefer change are optimistic people. Pessimistic people are static in nature.

Try to avoid repetitive words and get know how to use synonyms.

I hope this information will be helpful for your writings. Good Luck !!!

Regards,
Arun
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 23, 2014   #6
When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read.

Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.


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