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TOEFL:Some people prefer to work for a large company; international conferences


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Dec 15, 2013   #1
Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Companies vary from small to large ones based on the context, success and needs of their work. Small companies usually have a local job in the area, while large companies work in an international context providing for the entire nation or even for other foreign countries. I personally prefer to work for a large company for several reasons.

First, to find a job in a large company is way more easier than to find a job in a small company. Large companies always look for new skilled employees to fill in their need of distributing, managing and selling their products in different countries. For example, if a large company decides to open a branch in a foreign country, they would need more employees in that country to work there. In other words, Large company equals more job opportunity.

Second, I think that a large company can give better salaries than a smaller one. The fact that a company is a large one, this means that it's having a considerable success. In other words, this means that the company can give more salaries to its employees. For instance, common sense would tell us that a famous and international known company won't give the same salary as a small local company.

Third, I love travelling around the world. large companies have an international reputation, as they organize international conferences, meetings and workshops which will give me the opportunity to travel in different countries and meet new people. As well as learning new skills in my field from these workshops.

In conclusion, i can certainly state that I would rather prefer working in a large company than in a small one. I have different reasons to hold that, such as having a better chance to find work, having a better salary and having the opportunity to travel around the world to attend international conferences.

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Dec 16, 2013   #2
I think it is a good essay. You should probably add some more "meat" (words) to ensure you get all the points. You had some minor problems such as Capital letter after a period. Grammar - more easy equals easier, so there is no idiom "more easier". the sentence "Small companies usually have a local job in the area" should be changes because it is people who have jobs and not the company.

Hope it helped, I am also only an advanced beginner so I hope some one review mine as well.
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Dec 17, 2013   #3
Companies vary from small to large ones based on the context, success and needs of their work.

... this is good for the hook :)

Small companies usually have a local job in the area, while large companies work in an international context providing for the entire nation or even for other foreign countries.

.... this is the section you explain the reader about the background of the issue. It is not well presented. Rephrase the prompt with your own words and use it to introduce the issue to the reader.
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Dec 17, 2013   #4
Ok, thanks very much for your correction. I'm really interested to know, in your opinion, How much would an essay like this probably get in the Toefl exam in a scale from 0 to 5?
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Dec 17, 2013   #5
I'll put in some comments about your grammar.

First, to find a job in a large company is way more easier than to find a job in a small company.

As mentioned by Sivian easier already has a comparative quality.

Large companies equals more job opportunities

I think if you are talking about things in general you should use plural

Second, I think that a large company can give better salaries than a smaller one. The fact that a company is a large one, this means that it's having a considerable success. In other words, this means that the company can give more salaries to its employees. For instance, common sense would tell us that a famous and international known company won't give the same salary as a small local company.

I get your point but this is a very poor argument because your reasoning is circular.


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