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By 2004, People preferred to buy more chicken than other meats. Fish and meat consumed - IELTS


Hervin 1 / 3 1  
Feb 6, 2016   #1
The lines graphs illustrates the needs of fish and different kinds of meat consumed by people in a particular European country over period 25 years.

It is clear that the noticeable trend was the consumption of beef and lamb tended to decline but the chicken had to a significant increasing year by year. Meanwhile, the fish was a remain steady.

In 1979, the percentage of beef consuming was the highest around 220 grams per week per person. In comparison, the other kinds of meats which was consumed by the people were 150 grams of lamb,140 grams of chicken and 60 grams of fish respectively. The consumption of beef and lamb started decreasing gradually in 1989. On the contrary. the number of the chicken significantly increased about 60 grams per week. While, the fish declined slightly around 10 grams since 1979.

By 2004, People preferred to consumed chicken than other meats in which this tendency made a substantial fluctuation of chicken at 250 grams per week. On the other hand. the trend of beef and lamb had a gradual fall every year. Lastly, The fish consuming kept stable about 50 grams per person per week.




OP Hervin 1 / 3 1  
Feb 7, 2016   #2
The lines graphs illustrates the needs NUMBER of fish and different kinds of meat consumed by people in a particular European country over A period OF 25 years.

- Thank you for correcting my writing. But, as far as I know this part is called introduction not summary overview. What do you mean by saying 3-5 keyword sentences? I think is already compelete because I just paraphrased the title of the graph.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Feb 7, 2016   #3
When writing an IELTS introduction, you are expected to provide an overview of the information that will be contained in the report. This is not a simple essay. This is supposed to be an accurate restatement of information provided to you. There is an expectation that the writer will first analyze the data in the illustration prior to presenting it to the reader. That said, the reader has some expectations as well.

Remember how in an ordinary essay you are supposed to restate the prompt, offer an overview of prompt related opinions, and then your point of view? That is known as the flow of discussion. In the IELTS essay, you are expected to deliver something similar to that. In this case, your introduction should include the title of the graph, an overview of the graph information (increase and decrease), and the final outcome of the chart / illustration. Those are the parts that comprise the introduction of an IELTS essay. Writing those bits of information always take at least 3 sentences, with a maximum of 5. Look at the other sample IELTS Writing Tasks in this forum, you will notice that all of them depict the same kind of introduction / summary overview.

Do you understand my explanation? Feel free to ask questions if you still have any.
OP Hervin 1 / 3 1  
Feb 11, 2016   #4
oh I see, thank you so much for the explanation. Now I know between the introduction and overview must be combined into one paragraph. Sorry for the misunderstanding because I usually separate it and am taught by IELTS tutor to do so. I don't know if the pattern I use is only for practice in order to make us recognize which one of the introduction and overview easily.


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