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People should satisfy with their destiny because we can not change - Toefl exam essay


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Sep 29, 2014   #1
Hello, I have test on January I need your help to improve my writting

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

life contains different kinds of people and each person has own destiny. everyone should satisfies with their destiny because we can not change. In fact, there are a lot people have coveted things such as work, house, kids and life in general.

firstly, lack of persuasion lead to people live a miserable life because they always think of failing.For example, a person has a job in a company and he has a good salary. on the other hand, he always looks to his friend, who is the owner of the company, because they are studied together in the university. In this case, he should be satisfy what he has and he dose not compare with others. Its a great to be ambitious, but we should obey our destiny and enjoy our life.

secondly, lack of persuasion lead to lack of enjoyment because they think of others rather than their-self. In fact, the people are like in racing to buy things and wear expensive cloths because they want to pretend. life is not just thing, we have to work hard to achieve our dream. life is not show of to others because we are human and we have mind to think wisely.

Thirdly, lack of persuasion lead to parents compare their kids with other kids. This a big problem because it effects in our kids negatively by losing their self-confident. As result of that, the kids abundant their parents and they feel upset from ever thing. In fact, the parent should be supportive; it means they must not push their kids down.

In brief, we should think meaningful and wise. We have to aisle to our dream without concern about unnecessary thing. Even though we do not have everything like others we should interest in our life. The life is short and we should exploit every moment in our life.

Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Sep 29, 2014   #2
First of all, we almost are in the same situation;D. Ironically my test is going to be in the middle of December. Anyhow do not forget about layout. Furthermore what does this mean,,,We have to aisle to our dream without concern about unnecessary thing'' i really advise you to replace the word aisle into something else.;) There are tiny problems suck as caps lock e.t.c. Overall good job!
OP nosha 1 / 2  
Sep 30, 2014   #3
thanks for your note I will try to do better... that sound good good luck,, could I ask you about any website help you to practice before the exam


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