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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life


robinm147 1 / 2  
Feb 24, 2019   #1

changing jobs good for career?



Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kind of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, some believe that changing jobs at least one time to do something different is good for the people. I agree with this notion and believe that it will help us to improve our skills as well as help to develop a challenging attitude

First of all shifting professions will help us to improve our qualities and skills. A person doing a designing job will always tend to be theoretical unless he gets some experience at the practical work. This not only will enrich his experience but also can make him a better designer. A new working environment can help us to get exposed to new techniques and practices available and can further enhance their productivity. For example, I came to know about the options available in Microsoft excel for data analysis from my new colleagues, which helped to save a considerable amount of time. If was continuing to work my old employer I would have never learned about it and probably doing the job in the same old fashioned way.

Moreover shifting jobs can help us to become more challenging and adventurous. Any job will become monotonous and mundane after a long period of time. Life becomes dull and boring in such circumstances. At that time a new job, a new responsibility or a new job can help to regain the excitement and colors in Life. My fatter after retirement started a small business and I find him active and passionate than ever before. Knowing that "I have promises to keep and miles to go before I sleep" will help us stay positive and active

In short, shifting job can result in enhancement of one's skills as well as even improve the quality of life. So if anyone gets an opportunity for changing jobs he should consider it seriously
Harman8484 1 / 1  
Feb 24, 2019   #2
You can rephrase the general statement like this: Switching jobs once and opting different work is advantageous as per some of the population.I agree with this notion and believe it helps in improvement of skills and develop a challenging attitude.

para 1: You have used the example in the second sentence. According to me you should use more general statement. Like: " People in a particular job tend to use a limited resource which is available there within, they need to explore more so that they can excel in their field."

A new working .... This sentence can be written as ""A new working environment can help us in getting to learn new techniques and practices which are available, which can further enhance our productivity.""

Their are grammatical mistakes in your sentences. You need to work on these.

For example, I came ...
For example, When i came to know about the option available in Microsoft Excel which i was unaware from my colleagues, i saved a considerable amount of time. Had i been working for the old employer i would have never learned about it and would still be working the old fashioned way.

In second paragraph you should give one example also to support your reason.

I am not a professional but here is my feedback. Hope it helps you achieve the target score. All the best and Thanks
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,765 4768  
Feb 25, 2019   #3
Consider using more descriptive adjectives in your essay instead of simple words such as "a long period of time". That phrase is only a simple phrase composition which will not help to increase your LR and GRA score. You should be using more academic sounding and formal expressions to describe things. Phrases like "an extended period of time" would work towards increasing the LR and GRA potential of your presentation.

Always double check your sentence presentations for any punctuation errors that might affect your GRA score. Remember that the word "so" when used at the start of a sentence, is considered an introductory element and must have a comma after the word. Also, words like "old fashioned" requires a hyphen to connect the two words of different meaning to create a new, united meaning for the seemingly unrelated words. Therefore, present it as "old-fashioned".

There are other grammatical errors in the essay that could have easily been spotted and corrected had you taken the time to review the essay first. Don't always assume that the version you finish writing is the final form. That is just a draft. Always review and revise the essay to help boost your scoring chances in all fronts. Only after checking the essay twice can you consider it to be in final submission form.


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