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Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. Do you agree or disagree?


agi 13 / 30 4  
Feb 11, 2014   #1
There has been a highly debatable topic about whether or not car driving in the city area should be prohibited. Most people suggest no drive in the city center while other oppose the view. As far as i am concerned, That policy to regulate car driving in the urban area would serve to the larger community goal of health. In this essay, i will represent the all supporting reasons for banning a car.

First, People's concern on public health issues is increasing in the recent years in the developing countries. Thousands of car are generating a considerable amount of smoke that is harmful to children and elder's health system. As a result, city citizen's respiratory system is badly damaged by smoke car produce. For example, in Delhi, 9 million car is the main contributor of air pollution. Therefore, Car is also other reason of stressful life. We finds car as stressful as car horning noise is very disturbing to your safe and calm life.

Second, It is a fact that most people waste a precious time on the traffic jam. If car is prohibited legally, everyone will be forced to take a public transportation system to go to work, school, shop and so on. In the wake of that regulation, Everyone would take a whole benefit of bus and car as it is quick and cheap. Moreover, It would be helpful to our financial status since petrol cost relatively expensive to family's budget.

In the contrary, Banning car would be one of the impossible mission to accomplish. Most people prefer to drive their own cars because its privacy and comfort. Since most of us want to be less dependent from others, especially on issue of personal schedules, car banning policy would not take a support from public.

To sum up, i am convinced that even though there are a invaluable benefits comes with car banning policy, it's implement will not be as easy as we imagine.

dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 11, 2014   #2
In this essay, i will represent the all supporting reasons for banning a car.

Well, you can avoid these types of sentences. They do not add much value for your essay. It is nicer if you conclude the introduction with a statement expressing your view.
OP agi 13 / 30 4  
Feb 11, 2014   #3
thank you for your feedback, later i will add revised new version of my introduction. How about the other parts of essay? Grammar?
halleybachelor 16 / 25 1  
Feb 11, 2014   #4
Most people suggest no drive in the city center while others oppose the view

i will re present the all supporting reasons for banning a car

Thousands of car are generating a considerable amount of smoke that is harmful to children and elder's health system .
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 12, 2014   #5
In this essay, i will represent the all supporting reasons for banning a car.

Write a clear sentence that express your opinion on the issue. Do not express it in a vague or complicated way. Clarity of sentences and ideas matter above all other aspects when it comes to essay writing as you need to keep the reader's attention towards your essay.

If car is prohibited legally,

This sounds awkward and I don't think any country would take such an action. You could have said;
If the usage of cars is controlled by legal means....
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 15, 2014   #6
For me in this task you should answer the prompt
Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. Do you agree or disagree ?
better if you involve one of them, agree or disagree, explicit in your intro and conclusion
Shinigami97 10 / 16 1  
Feb 15, 2014   #7
one of the impossible mission

Just for grammatical error ! Mission => Missions

a invaluable benefits comes

Omit article "a"

it's implement will not be as easy as we imagine.

this sentence has problem of structure. For particular, it's => it is implement that !

:D hope you get better
OP agi 13 / 30 4  
Feb 15, 2014   #8
Could you all kindly advise me how to improve my grammar?


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