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Some people think cooking at home is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with?


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May 10, 2020   #1

home-cooked meal



There is an increasingly popular belief that cooking at home is a waste of time. However, I find myself in complete disagreement with this opinion because of the merits they offer.

First, Cooking is not as time-consuming as you think. With the inception of the modern era, There are many services, especially regarding raw ingredients delivery, for customers. All you need is to write down what you need to prepare for the meal on the software and click done. So you just need to focus on preparing the meal. If you still have concerns about dirty dishes after a meal, you can share the responsibility of cleaning up with other people in the meal or just buy a dishwasher to make it easier. According to my calculations, this only took less than an hour.

Secondly, it exerts a number of positive effects on people. As I mentioned, the materials we buy must be hygienic and healthy, so you can prepare the dish to suit your taste and ensure the food quality. Besides, this is an opportunity to heals relationships with people during meals and improves the cooking ability for an independent life. Think about it, after a hard-working day, you cook by yourself and enjoy it with your family, which will help you relax and tighten the family bonds and also enhance cooking skills in the transition to adulthood to better prepare for the future. Without this, we can lose the cohesion of social relationships and the ability to live independently.

In conclusion, my opinion is that home-cooked meal is not only healthy and hygienic but also improve personal skills and the family relationship.

Can someone help me comment on this essay?

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May 10, 2020   #2
Your essay does not apparently follow the prompt discussion requirements. It omits the specific discussion topics as indicated from the original prompt which are:

Some people believe that cooking at home is a waste of time. They feel it is better to buy fast food which is more convenient and less stressful in modern life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

Based on the original topic, the discussion requirements should be based on an extent essay that supports either the fast food discussion or the home cooking option. An example of a prompt responsive paraphrase for the discussion is:

These days, people find it more convenient to order fast food. Apparently, they find home food preparation to be quite aggravating at times so they opt to order take-out instead. As someone who likes to cook and does not find the practice annoying, I have to say that I am in complete disagreement with the people who believe food delivery services are the best option for meals.

There was no need to mention a discussion about dirty dishes. That is not part of the cooking discussion. It was not referred to in the original discussion because it is not a consideration when it comes to meal times. You still have to wash dishes when you order food delivery. That discussion is a prompt deviation and will be noted by the examiner as a point to score down your TA accuracy.

The conclusion you presented does not meet the 3 sentence minimum requirement. It does not represent a proper paraphrase of the discussion topics presented. That will be an additional deduction in your TA score.

Now, I reviewed your essay based only on the parts that applied to the original prompt. The examiner will do the same thing in the actual test. He will score you only for the sections that apply to the original prompt, deduct word points for the irrelevant discussions, and adjust your score downward. If I am right and the essay does not adhere to the original prompt requirements, you will find that the essay may not achieve an impressive score in the end.


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