Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion in an important part of life.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some people think that being think being fashionable is extremely a luxury. While others argue that is reasonable because fashion has essential role in life. I believe that even if fashion items cost too high it holds an important part in life.
Sometimes, some people cots too much money to be fashionista in particularly in women. High price items are reasonable because it have high excellence product. Others believe that branded product is better than common items. For instance, Lois Vuition bag and Rolex watch have high quality material, latest fashion and more detail process than others. As a result, we can use it for a long time, to show social level and more confident than using unbranded items. Finally, the best excellence fashion is cost too expensive but it is very acceptable for it.
In addition, although branded product is an expensive, but it is reasonable price for some people, because fashion is a crucial part in life. Being fashionable makes others more confident and comfortable which affect their work performance. For example when someone looks stylist in the office that influences their work and social level. Some people will have a good socialism with other. Also, when they meet with a fashionable client, it helps to make a good conversation and make the best deal for their business. However, being fashionable need high price but they can purchase fashions item based on their money strength.
In conclusion, fashion items is luxury necessity, but it is acceptable for some people because fashion is essential thing in human life in particularly in work world.
Fadhilah, there are several things to be noticed here as follows:
First paragraph:
- Some people think that being think being fashionable is extremely a luxury.
- WhileOn the contrary, others argue that is reasonable because fashion hasplays essential role in life.
- I believe that even if fashion items cost too high,(put a comma here to make your essay better) it holds an important part in life Repetitive words, I suggest you to find any synonym or other words that you can use to replace this phrase.
Second paragraph:
- Sometimes, some people cotscost too much money to be a fashionista in particularly in women.
- ... latest fashion, and more detailed process than others.
- Finally, the best excellence fashion is cost too expensive but it is very acceptable for it it is worth to buy.
Third paragraph:
- In addition, although branded product is an expensive, but it is reasonable price forsome people still willing to buy it.I split the original sentence into two; the continuation is as follows .
- This because they put fashion as their priority. .
- For example, when someone looks styliststylish in the office thatwill directly influence their work and social level.
- .. item based on their money strengthfinancial .
For the last paragraph, I recommend you to add two sentences at least because a decent essay is usually has three sentences in each paragraph. Also, please be careful with lexical choice, spend more time on reading to help you solving the problems.
Hi beautiful classmate miss dhila,
- Some people think that being think being fashionable is ...
- ... money to be fashionista in particularly in women
- High price items are reasonable because it havehas high excellence product.
- In addition, although branded product is an expensive,
- Being fashionable makes others feeling more confident and comfortable which will affect their work performance.
- ..., it helps them to makehave a good conversation ...
Hopefully it helps. Keep Writing. Fighting!!!
