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Ielts writing task 2: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good


Rachel Hoang 1 / -  
Aug 25, 2021   #1

pros and cons of hosting an international sports event



People have different views about whether it is beneficial for a country to host an international sports event or not. In my opinion, I think that hosting an international sports event is much more valueable for everybody to entertain and develop their own economies.

There are various reasons why it might be considered as a bad idea to hold global sports activities. Firstly, taking a tremendous cost event can slurge money when its value brings back as not beneficial as it seems. An possible consequence of hosting these events could be that the lives of the people could be disrupted when many residents have to put aside their works to prepare for sports competitions.

In spite of the above arguments, I still support the view that the nations should hold some international activities events. First of all, if countries host some kind of international events, they can attract numerous people from around the world to come to their nations. For example, annual Olympic games in some countries like Japan, China, Brazil,... could attract million people and athletes every stages. Secondly, hosting successful big events brings the honor to their nations and this should result in a thriving economy, more modern infrastructure, a better condition and more friendly environment. At the Olympic games Tokyo 2020, regardless of Covid 19, Japanese goverment made so much effort and finally, they still have had one of the most successful events in history.

In my conclusion, it is a great idea to host an international activities event for the nation.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,686 4117  
Aug 27, 2021   #2
The writer has taken the incorrect aproach to the discussion. It has been written from a personal opinion aspect without consideration of the original discussion requirements. The writer's disregard for the provided discussion instruction is what could lead to a low scoring, to failing score, for this presentation. The first paragraph restatement should represent the discuss both views and present a personal opinion instruction by providing seperate sentences for the 2 public opinions first, then the personal opinion, last.

In this case, the essay clearly emanates from the personal point of view of the author alone. The wording and reasoning does not represent the public thoughts or exaplantions of the 2 opinions. So the discussion format is definitely not as expected and will therefore, be scored based on only a partially correct response. All scoring sections will be reduced, regardless of the discussion presented because the writing failed to adhere to the indicated discussion format.


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