@langtieubich your work cannot be scored due to the missing prompt requirement. The instructions for the discussion are required as part of your work assessment. Without it, proper scoring is impossible. However, a general review of your essay may be provided.
You must be careful when it comes to punctuation use as the lack of it could have negative effects on your GRA score which uses your grammar and punctuation as its basis for scoring. Your last sentence in the opening paraphrase should have a period at the end of it. The period is currently missing.
LR scoring for your essay will be affected by your lack of proper knowledge when it comes to word meaning and usage, which will also have a direct GRA score as part of the grammar consideration. Some of your mistakes include:
with the instruction of public transport lanes
- Correct term: Introduction of public transport.
- Instructions means to direct people to use public transport lanes while introduction means to create and instruct. You mean the latter.
moree discernable can acrrue to
- I can't even guess what you are trying to say in this sentence.
- Moree - More (wring spelling on your part)
- The sentence lacks a proper verb to describe the topic / subject of air deterioration.