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Essay : some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution


langtieubich 1 / -  
Sep 4, 2018   #1
Please help me check this essay and give mark on scale from 1 to 10

solution for reducing air pollution



The escalating number of cars, recently, has been considered to be the main culprit of air contamination . while many people put forward the idea of encouraging car-free days as a viable remedy, i personally believe there exist other feasible solutions to this dilema

Advocates of the campaign opine that this implementation can lead to considerable headway in air quality. Their rationale is that since private cars take chief responsibility for the emission of countless hazardous substances, their restriction can play a pivotal role in gradually reducing air contaminants, thus adressing this pressing matter effectively.

Promising as this idea seems, it is far from being perfect. In fact, the car - restriction campaign only takes effect in developed regions where travelling by car is prevalent. When it comes to developing nations like Vietnam, it's hardly applicable given the fact that scooteres are of more frequent use. The alarming air degradation , on the other hand, can be proactively addressed with the instruction of public transport lanes as well as enhancement of their inside facilities. It 's just a matter of time before travellers switch from cars to the mass transit provided their velocity , safety and convenience are guaranteed .

To summerise, while car-free days bring about particular perks, moree discernable can acrrue to the matter of air deterioration if other practical measures are taken in which the reinforcement of public transport should be given priority.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4771  
Sep 5, 2018   #2
@langtieubich your work cannot be scored due to the missing prompt requirement. The instructions for the discussion are required as part of your work assessment. Without it, proper scoring is impossible. However, a general review of your essay may be provided.

You must be careful when it comes to punctuation use as the lack of it could have negative effects on your GRA score which uses your grammar and punctuation as its basis for scoring. Your last sentence in the opening paraphrase should have a period at the end of it. The period is currently missing.

LR scoring for your essay will be affected by your lack of proper knowledge when it comes to word meaning and usage, which will also have a direct GRA score as part of the grammar consideration. Some of your mistakes include:

with the instruction of public transport lanes

- Correct term: Introduction of public transport.
- Instructions means to direct people to use public transport lanes while introduction means to create and instruct. You mean the latter.

moree discernable can acrrue to

- I can't even guess what you are trying to say in this sentence.
- Moree - More (wring spelling on your part)
- The sentence lacks a proper verb to describe the topic / subject of air deterioration.


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