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Some people think that parents should teach children ; INTRODUCTION


behrooz_00133 3 / 3  
Oct 15, 2013   #1
Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on being good member of society. While some people think it is the duty of parents to teach children to be good at society others believe that schools are fully responsible for this but I personally think it is both parents and schools duty to teach children how to be good in society.

OP behrooz_00133 3 / 3  
Oct 15, 2013   #2
Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on being good member of society. While some people think it is the duty of parents to teach children to be good at society others believe that schools are fully responsible for this but I personally think it is both parents and schools duty to teach children how to be good in society.
zazros 1 / 3  
Oct 15, 2013   #3
you're just rephrasing the prompt. redo.
leoking 7 / 24 1  
Oct 15, 2013   #4
what is the best way to teacher our younger generation has become a controversial issue among the society. some people believe that parents hold major responsibility, while others think that schools should be responsible for that. however, my view is that both schools and parents should share the educational responsibility together.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 15, 2013   #5
Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on beinga person becoming a good member of society. ... a good hook

While some people think it is the duty of parents to teach children to be good at society others believe that schools are fully responsible for this

This is fine.... you introduce the argument.... But you should have stopped at this point.

but I personally think it is both parents' and schools' duty to teach children how to be good members in society.

This one should be a new line in which you express your view. You follow the right structure for the introduction and that means you should earn a good score on intro :)


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