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Most people think that the truth should be objective rather that subjective


Aug 24, 2020   #1

The news should be reliable



With the help of technology, the media become more vital in every corner of the world. A lot of individual believes that broadcasting or printing news should be reliable with fact and figure rather than arguments and obligations. Therefore, upcoming paragraphs will discuss the actual work of media industries with my notion regarding these statements.

Firstly, news should be base on truth incident rather than manipulate the audience. Subsequently, industries should think more than twice before publishing any news because it might affect people's emotions. Last but not least, the media has to work for themselves growth but before that, they have clear thought in their mind that they are representing the nation in front of the world.

Moreover, the main role and responsibility of the newspapers are to share and aware of the local audience. In addition, they can start the campaign for nation development like, advertise employment details, enlighten about the detrimental effect of pollution with a solution and many more. By this way, they will increase a customer base with reliability. For instance, many print media daily published one article for career-oriented women and they were discussed about new opportunities in the future. Therefore, this is the main purpose of newspaper industries.

To conclude, newspaper publishers are become more selfish and focusing on ameliorating their publicity. Hence, I believe that not all news is always true and there will be some add-on story for awaking curiosity in readers.
QuocHuu 7 / 14  
Aug 24, 2020   #2
Here are some gramatical false, i beleive
-Themselves ( should be: their), base( should be: based)
-....like,...,enlightening.....
Overall, your essay should be added more examples and contrasts. Moreover, oviously, your essay is a little bit short (241/250 in ielts), therefor, try to develop and use more complex structure to enhance your article.
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Aug 24, 2020   #3
The original prompt is:
Most people think that truth should be objective rather than subjective when it comes to news.
Do you think all news true?
What is the function of newspaper?


So, The first paragraph should be more accurate in its representation of the original discussion and question points. What you wrote was a made up introduction that is not related to the original prompt at all. A more similar one would have been:

News could be purposeful or introspective in presentation. I believe that news may be filled with half truths and half lies. Since the function of a newspaper is to inform people without bias, we have to consider all of the previously stated factors in relation to the purpose of a newspaper.

Your reasoning paragraphs are not strong. The topics are under developed, with little explanation, and are totally unrelated in discussion from reasoning paragraph 1 onward. The lack of clarity in the discussion is what made your presentation confusing to the reader. The presentation failed to truly support an explanation of your opinion because of grammar and clarity issues. You need to work on properly outlining your discussion topics and supporting sentences. Only when you can properly and clearly support single topics per paragraph will you be able to form properly developed paragraph presentations.


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