I am a new user here, and I am not good in English..
So, I will be really sorry if I mislead you.
I think you use some good examples to stand your points, and I do learn a lot from your essay.
Still, here are some of the problem that I found.
You can see them as a reference.
Wish you good luck. =)
He often helps the other neighbors fix the sink
In my opinion, "He often helps " other " neighbors"
When we raise and take good care of our pets as our members of our family
I think you can change it into " as a member of our family "