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'People use some drugs, always' - essay about drugs.


jurgita /  
Jan 6, 2009   #1
Drugs
People always use some kinds of drugs. Despite effect of drug millions of people constantly consume different legal and illegal drugs.
That have affected people's mind and changing their behavior, sometimes people are aggressive and do crimes. Drugs become one of the most threatening factors. For example, drugs alter normal body functions. When you take drug you can do much harm to themselves and other people. As a result, narcotics are very harmful to health. If people often use drugs, they can not survive without them. Also narcotics are very expensive. Some people use drugs because they want to try something new, relax, to forget the problems. Now in the world smokes a lot of people. Tobacco ï one of the world's best selling drugs.

Antiquities people knew the drug. Person has not been using drugs much, and they could not do such damage. (As now) I believe drugs can disrupted people, change their behavior and affect others. So do not take drugs and your life will be better.
JerrySpock 2 / 4  
Jan 6, 2009   #2
You might want to narrow down your topic. Drugs is pretty broad, and it seems like you're talking about drugs in a very specific way. Maybe talk about "Harmful Effects of Drugs" or "Why People Take Drugs" or "The Most Popular Drug: Tobacco" or "Why You Shouldn't do Drugs" etc...
EF_Constance - / 143  
Jan 6, 2009   #3
Not a problem. Be sure to post your new, edited essay if you want more suggestions, etc.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jan 6, 2009   #4
I agree with everyone else -- you need to narrow down your topic.

You then also need to expand massively on your thesis. Even "the harmful effects of illegal drugs," a much narrower thesis than you have at present, would require far more than a single paragraph to discuss intelligently.

First, you would have to justify your decision to focus on illegality as a criteria for categorization, especially since the illegality of drugs has little to do with their effects, either on individuals or on society. Tobacco, for instance, is far more addictive than marijuana, while alcohol causes far more social problems than the use of either ecstasy or cocaine. At the same time, legality is relativistic: what is illegal in America may not be so in, say, Amsterdam. Even within America, the way heroin addicts get treated by law enforcement in California may be quite different from the way they get treated in Dallas.

You might want to focus more on the effects of taking any drug recreationally, regardless of legality. You could then look at the potential downsides that may attach -- mental addiction, physical addiction, impairment of judgment, etc. If you have space (you didn't say what length, if any, you were limited to) you should also discuss, at least briefly, the benefits of recreational drug use. After all, people use drugs recreationally for a reason, right? If you want your case to be convincing, you are going to have to perform what is essentially a cost-benefit analysis, in which you show that the costs of drug use outweigh their benefits. If you leave out the benefits entirely, then you will end up doing little more than parroting anti-drug propaganda, which seems pointless, from an educational point of view.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 7, 2009   #5
Yes, you can narrow the topic by saying something specific. For example, you write:

"So do not take drugs and your life will be better." This is a good sentence. You can argue that life is better for people who do not use illegal drugs. That is a specific argument, and you gave lots of reasons to back it up. You should make that argument at the beginning of the essay.

Then, you can write a paragraph about the counter-argument. You should write about what people say when they argue that drugs improve your life. Then, you can tell why they are wrong and you are right.

Then, you can review all the ideas and conclude.

I hope that helps!!!
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jan 7, 2009   #6
Thanks Kevin. I think you were able to reduce the essence of my post into something a bit more accessible. :-)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 8, 2009   #7
This form of collaboration is good for that sort of thing!
mikedogg90 3 / 6  
Jan 9, 2009   #8
People always use some kinds of drugs. Despite the effects of drugs, millions of people constantly consume (abuse?) various types of legal and illegal substances.

I hope this helps! Great topic, heres a few suggestions:

That have affected people's mind and changing their behavior, sometimes people are aggressive and do crimes.

Maybe something like this?:

With the power to alter normal behavior, drugs can cause people to aggressively commit crimes


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