IELTS writing Task 1 - International Visitors to New Zealand: transport used during visit
The provided bar chart show what transport chosen by visitors while visit New Zealand. The highest level of visitors use car. the second choices are plane and coach and others go by train and both.
Just under 70 per cent of the foreign visitors use car to enjoy their vacation in New Zealand. However, there are the same rate for visitor who use plane and coach, more than 30 per cent for each. While 20 per cent visitors use train in New Zealand and just under 10 per cent visitors use boat for their holiday transport.
Tn the conclusion, most people use a private transport to enjoy their vacation while others who are accounted for more 80 per cent choose public transport like plane, coach, train and boat.
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what transportS chosen by visitors while to visit New Zealand. OVERALL, IT IS IMPORTANT TO NOTE THAT The highest level of visitors IS use OF carS. ON THE OTHER HAND, the second choices are plane ...
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i intended to give the image, but there was a problem.
well, here is the chart
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- The provided bar chart show what transport ...
A breakdown of the proportion of transportation modes during the international attendance in New Zealand is illustrated in the bar chart and measured in percentage. While the number of car break a record as the highest percentage, using boat as air transport seems unpopular.