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People visit museums when they travel to new places; 'National Museum of Iraq'


tarbiat 3 / 6  
Aug 18, 2013   #1
TOPIC:Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit
museums?


Museum is like a lake which you can grasp your lack. Some people make a tour just to visit museums. Visiting museums would also be my priority if I travel to a city because:

Originally, what do you do when you encounter a something which you don't have any information about it? Surely, you should refer to its catalog to get information.

Like that I think museums are the catalog of cities which can give us a lot of information and rise our Wittig. For example I spent my vacation in Iraq last year. I saw the National Museum of Iraq in Baghdad. Almost I did not know anything about Iraq. When I saw the ancient statues in the National Museum of Iraq I deduced that Iraq is ancient country.

Secondly, a lot of people wish to travel by Time Machine. I think museum fulfill this desire. You travel to hundreds or thousands years ago and you see how our ancestors lived? When I was a teenager I visited the Louvre Museum. That was really fantastic. For a while I felt that I live in the past.

Besides, museums may give us some idea. One of my best experiment was done after visiting of The National Automobile Museum in Nevada. There was some tiny automobile

like a toy, but those work like their real ones. That time an idea sparkled in my mind. I tried to make tiny fan with the characteristic of real fan. After that I made a tiny motorboat. I think I became somewhat creative after visiting that museum.

However, in my view museums are like a pool of historical and useful information that every people in any age and any caste might use and enjoy that.
testtaker 6 / 20 4  
Aug 18, 2013   #2
You have presented some good examples such as museum as time machine and museums as a source of new ideas, but I think you have some problems in tense and sentence structure.

Museum is like a lake which you can grasp your lack.

I can't get what you mean by this sentence. Did you want to say something like this: Museum is like a lake from which you can grasp substances to compensate your lack?

Some people make a tour just to visit museums.

This is not a good cause!

Visiting museums would also be my priority if I travel to a city because: Oo riginally, what do you do when you encounter a something about which you don't have any information? about it

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Surely, you should refer to (go through) its catalog to get information.

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rise our Wittig (enhance our knowledge)

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Almost I did not know anything about Iraq.(I knew almost nothing about Iraq)

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and you see how our ancestors lived? .

...For a while I felt that I livelived in the past.

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One of my best experiment was done after visiting of The National Automobile Museum in Nevada. (Visiting the National Automobile Museum in Nevada is one of my best experiences.)

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worked like their real ones.

Good luck.
OP tarbiat 3 / 6  
Aug 18, 2013   #3
thank you testtaker for your great corrections.
but your last correction does not support my purpose.

One of my best experiment was done after visiting of The National Automobile Museum in Nevada which was a tiny fan that was made by me.

I am not native. your corrections really help me.
thanks.
testtaker 6 / 20 4  
Aug 18, 2013   #4
Ohh...I got it wrong! You could use 'project/project work' in place of 'experiment' to make the message of the sentence clearer.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Aug 21, 2013   #5
tarbiat:
Museum is like a lake which you can grasp your lack.
I can't get what you mean by this sentence. Did you want to say something like this: Museum is like a lake from which you can grasp substances to compensate your lack?

Yes.... I too can't figure out what you really try to mean. My advice for you is not to take risks with your hook, which is intended to give a punch to the reader and grab his attention to you. Try phrases with what you are very confident. Also make sure they are presented with good clarity.
thomascarlson - / 7  
Aug 31, 2013   #6
Museums contains the largest collection of the art works.These collections represents the true heritage,customs and traditions of the great civilizations.The travellers always want to study the culture of the places they travel.Thus the museums plays a major role.


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