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"Many people visit museums when they travel to new places"; HISTORY


ana_p 27 / 81  
Apr 27, 2012   #1
Hi all,

Please help me with some ideas. It is very short essay, it should be in between 300-350 words. I tried to complete that in time limit.

Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Museum helps us to know more about that place and about the history of that place. In museum, many famous and historic things can be taken care by government. Generally, museums are located in central area of the city near other places like main market, theaters and restaurants, so that visitors can visit most of the places in city, and also, spend some time in museum.

Government takes care of all these things in museums like they keep these precious historic things alive from year to year. Museum keeps various famous paintings, utensils, cloths, and many other art and crafts things which were used in ancient time. I love to visit museums whenever I go to visit new place I definitely visit museums. Recently, when I went to Wisconsin dells, I visited Harley Davison museum. There were many motor cycles from the year when first motor cycle was built. They also mentioned how the technology gets improved and used to build motor cycles. They arranged all motor cycles in order of their make. This helps visitors to understand how the things changed from time to time. So I think many people visit museums first when they visit a new place, because after that they can decide their remaining plan to visit the other places.

Museum explains the tradition of the place, how people used to live in ancient time, their eating habits, cloths, ornaments, utensils, instruments and currency. Museums are the property of government and we all should learn to respect and take care of these things.

Please help with corrections and ideas.

Thanks,

Ana.

xitrona 4 / 11  
Apr 27, 2012   #2
Museum helps us to know more about one particular place and about the history of that place.

In museum, many famous and historic things can be taken care of by the government.

Generally, museums are located in central area of the city near other places like main market, theaters and restaurants, so that visitors can visit most of the places in city, and also, spend some time in museum.

Commonly, museums are located in central area of the city's activities such as main market, theaters and restaurants in order visitors could also visit those places in that city after the museum.

Government takes care of all these things in museums, for example they keep these precious historic things alive from year to year.

Museum keeps various famous paintings, utensils, cloths, and many other arts and crafts things which were used in the ancient time.

I love to visit museums. whenever I go to visit a new place, I definitely visit its museums.

Recently, when I went to Wisconsin dells, I visited Harley Davison museum.

There were many motor cycles from the year when the first motor cycle was built.

They also mentioned how the technology gets improved and used to build motor cycles.

They arranged all motor cycles in order of their make . what do you mean?

This helps visitors to understand how the things changed from time to time.

So I think many people visit museums first when they visit a new place, because after that they can decide their remaining plan to visit the other places.

Museum explains the tradition of one place, how people used to live in the ancient time, their eating habits, cloths, ornaments, utensils, instruments and currency.

Museums are the property of government and we all should learn to respect and take care of these things.it.

hope it helps!
OP ana_p 27 / 81  
Apr 28, 2012   #3
They arranged all motor cycles "in order of their make" means they arranged from the year when first motor cycle was built then second, third, forth and so on... (serially). I was confused while writing this sentence. Can I use this as it is? I am not sure. OR can you please suggest me alternative words for this?

Thanks
Ana.
Helper01 - / 2  
Apr 29, 2012   #4
They arranged all the model of motor cycles since the first time it is invented to the current 21st century.

Maybe there is other ways to put it in words. Hope this helps. =)
OP ana_p 27 / 81  
Apr 29, 2012   #5
hey thanks:)


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